Alone

Alone at a table

with so much to eat

 

Alone in a story

escape a defeat

 

Alone in ideas

as deep as the sea

 

Alone in my thoughts

What if's and Who be's

 

Alone in my room

locking out the shadows

 

Alone in my fear

the oceans deep shallows

 

Alone in depression

with no one who cares

 

Alone in sensation

a light-hearted air

 

Alone in myself

trapped, feeling scared

 

Alone in aloneness

who is out there?

Reviews

[Green]

Wow, really makes you realize how often you are alone in this world.
This was really good. I liked how kind of described each kind of alone with a little phrase after it. And even though a lot of it was how we are alone in sadder instances some of it seemed more optimistic like sensation and ideas. The fact that you included not only the sad but also the not sad, if not necessarily happy, in there too.

[Ees]

Very lonely poem you have here. It flowed beautifully and had a touch of "cuteness" to it. I am not sure how to explain why I have found it here, but I feel it. Isn't everybody alone?
Great writing, I love the simplicity of your style.

[Phillitup]

Thank you.

[Coyote Poetry]

Loneliness is a part of us. Hard to find peace in all things. I like the flow of thoughts and the question at the end. Good to reach out when you feel alone and sad. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Phillitup]

thank you very much! :)

[kublakhan27]

I'm pretty sure I know how you feel...I have many reasons to be happy but I rarely am...this is good :)

[Phillitup]

thanks

[Theartofburning]

Now this is a poem of despair.

Sitting at a table with four walls baring down on you.
So many chapters you can't seem to get through.
Your impression, and thoughts they are suffocating.
How far can your capacity stretch with those dark silhouettes?
Than your panic begans to seep in.
The state of unhappiness that has got your tongue..
Causing that physical feeling of despair.

In it's melancholy..
It was very beautiful.
^-^

[Phillitup]

thanks

[Sid]

I really like this piece, it has some great rhymes. You have kept this simple and it is easier to relate to, the loneliness and the fear of being alone are emotions everyone of us feels at some point in their lives...great work!!

[Tori Hughes]

this is amazing. and, ironically, fits in with me at this moment 100%. very well written, love they rhyming pattern. keep up the good work!

[Phillitup]

Thank you for your kind review! I have found that a lot of people can relate. Thanks again!

[ms. barrie]

this is just so epic, an amazing write, so many great lines in this piece. this is a very pleasant read, the rhyming and flow, imagery enriched with loneliness, fear of being lonely. you did a great job with this. thanks for sharing :)

[Phillitup]

Thank you for your kind words...

[Brianna Ray]

This poem is really well done, I love it :)

[Phillitup]

Thank you! :)

[Howard Blacklove]

This is pretty awesome. I think it has great rhythmic flow and great rhymes as well. I was immediately able to relate to it because it was easy to read and understand (not buried too deep into metaphors). It shows the difference between being physically alone-no one around- and the feeling of lonelyness- feeling alone no matter what situation you are in, even with people around. This was my favorite analogy/rhyme right here;

Alone in ideas
as deep as the sea
Alone in my thoughts
What if's and Who be's

Great poem buddy.

[Phillitup]

Thank you very much!