Stargazing

Bathe me in the blue evening light

the air is so fresh and clear

the wind crisp on my cheeks

stars dotting the sky

sparking, slowly appearing

the white moonlight

show me the way

cover me in your beauty

release me of my sins

pure and silent

I yearn for you

Reviews

[Muse]

So serene and beautiful in all of its simplicity.

[Delilah]

Yes I and thank you :)

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oh woww..what a beautiful image you have used your pen to draw here...i loved the scene really...

very nicely penned with nice flow and nice words picking..

[Delilah]

Thank you :)

[Sami Khalil]

A well costructed poem . Thank you for sharing.

[Rogue]

This is saying a lot by saying a little. Very well constructed and full of descriptive imagery.
Alas, for the pale light of the moon to make us pure and innocent once more..

Thank you for sharing this. :)

[Delilah]

Thank you for reading I'm glad you enjoyed the poem!

[Buddhistboy73]

Deep......and well written poem in my (humble) opinion.....:)
"Cover me in your beauty, release me of my sins...."
my favourite lines....:)
a hope filled poem that conjures up great imagery of hope and reminds us that we are but a small part of this gigantic loving universe....:)
thanks for sharing.,..

BB

[Delilah]

Thanks so much for reviewing, I'm glad you liked it!

[Trigorin]

Simple, but not too simple. You've expressed yourself very well in this piece, and I really don't have anything that I can point to as being majorly wrong with this piece. My one little niggling criticism is that line 8 sounds very cliche, at least to my ears. Maybe think of a more eloquent way of getting the same idea across? Either way, very well done.

[Delilah]

Thanks for reviewing, I guess it is a cliche and I'll look into possibly changing that line.

[Frieda P]

Eleven lines that say so much...not sure how the 'sins' fit in here, it seems more like a baptism then...I was thinking a lover, but I guess it's open to interpretation. Whichever way I like it, enjoyable read.

[Delilah]

Thanks for the review, yeah I guess the sins part might be a little out of place or confusing.