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I feel as though all love has left me,
a dusty whirlwind,
almost in my grasp
slipping through my fingers
I watch as it fades away,
time after time
I can't make you love me
I can only let you use me
worthless I fall to pieces
alone every night
I nurse my bruised heart
a hollow drum
plays in my stomach
all food tastes of ashes
all colors fade to grey
when the lusty moon appears
I can only stare out and wonder
when will I get it right?

Author's Note

What kind of imagery does this poem evoke? Does it make you feel anything?

Reviews

[Rogue]

Sadness, longing, an extreme feeling of insecurity due to the circumstances.

Imagery?
My imagination is extremely active so here you go:
Sitting in a chair alone at the dinner table, glancing at the empty place on the other side, pushing the uneaten food around on the plate in an absentminded fashion as I stare out the window wishing for something I can never have.

Very nice work. :)

[Delilah]

Thank you for reviewing I can see that as well

[jemaral]

love unrequited is what im getting from this also on the last part the emotional dominance switches to regret.

I see a scene in the bedroom sitting alone in the bed covered by the sheets alone and gazing outside the open window with a full moon beautifully shining outside.

Overall loneliness would be the emotion i feel as i read this piece

[Delilah]

I think you're right, its a whole mixture of those things