My War

A Poem by Olivier

For the longest time, There was two equal and opposite forces battling for control of my future.

The War

There is a brutal civil war happening right now

It is occurring in my very soul

Ripping apart my heart

Tearing through my mind

Searing my innards

And leaving devastation and confusion everywhere

My body is the battlefield

Sometimes, one side is winning. And I feel that I should conform to society.

I should go for the good grades, the good college, the wife and kids, the good job. I should have many friends and laugh and joke and go to parties. I should be what society has prepared me for.

Sometimes, the other has the upper hand. And I want to become wise and enlightened, compassionate and irrational. I want to do things no one has ever done. Help the world fundamentally. I want to save the unsaveable, I want to do the impossible. I want to experience life in a deeper way. Perhaps answer a few difficult questions.

These totally opposite and equal forces.

Are tearing me up

What can I do.

Which side will win

I don’t even know which one I am rooting for.

© 2018 Olivier

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Bigdek29

Hi Oliver.
I enjoyed your poem - I see the internal struggle - the structure of the poem, building to demonstrate your conflict and pulling back to a position of indecisive reality works. I have the same internal battles and I guess empathise with the poem in this sense. I do not possess the skill to critique this as a piece of poetry, all I would say is balance the dramatic with reserved - make us work a little. It was nice to read your work.

Posted 6 Years Ago

6 Years Ago

Thank you so very much for the review. It means alot that this poem spoke with someone. Cool fun fac.. read more

Chris

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