Gone

 

…

 

Watching you go

Leaving my empty soul

 

If I ran to you

Pulled you close

 

Wrapped us both

In past’s loving ghost

 

Your cold heart would melt

When my love was felt

 

You don’t see

Stolen is the best of me

 

While I watch you go

Leaving my empty soul

 

…

Reviews

[Jane Doe]

Wonderfully written. This is a sad, but beautiful poem. Thanks for sharing!

[Adela Muresan]

I love this one.

You really are a gifted poet, one of the best I came across, dough you should try putting a little bit more rhyme in there.

A.M

[Deborah Shepard]

powerful lines loved it

[Steven Pottle]

Wow- really powerful piece in just a few lines...

"You don't see
Stolen is the best of me"

These lines in particular remind me of someone I lost recently and that they actually take part of you with them.
Thank you for sharing this.

[marod]

wow!

praiseful!

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So SO relevant to what I am going through. Well crafted, concise. Thanks for posting this.

[Bubo]

So sad, really beautifully put when we watch a loved one walk away...........

Wrapped us both
In past's loving ghost

Your cold heart would melt
When my love was felt

If only that were possible...........such a beautiful thought and the flow is excellent.

The rating thingy whacked out sorry :(

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

A beautiful, melancholic poem. Succinct and telling. Very moving. What expressive emotions conveyed. Thank you for sharing.
Light,
Siddartha

[Coffee & Rain]

That is beautiful. I've felt the same way so many times