It comes from the heart!

i wasnt able to sleep last night so i took my journal and i started to write. i stopped for a minute and looked down my hall next to my room and i just started writing! this is what came out!

i sit in my hall
looking into my past
looking into everything that went wrong

i sit in my hall
looking into my future
looking into everything i can change

i sit in my hall
looking into my present
looking into who i am today

i sit and wonder
wonder how i can mend this life
this life of pain

i sit in my hall
my hall, that holds all lifes secrets
my hall, that has sen everything i have to offer

waiting for something to change
something to mend this heart
someone to love me again

i sit in my hall
wondering if anything is worth the pain ive seen
wondering if change will come

i sit in my hall
realize, change has begun
happiness is around the corner
love is over the hill

i sit in my hall
and thank you!

Author's Note

first official piece of writing what do you think?

Reviews

[Theresa]

Considering this is your first "official" piece this is really really good. I like how the hall represents your past and your future. I like how you say it holds your secrets it's kind of like if walls could talk. It's amazing how something so simple can provoke a great piece of writing. Nicely done.

[nowardan]

I think this might be the poem that saved the day or at least my day.. And I thank you for your strength. You are very vulnerable here and that is what it takes to allow US to hear the poem and you. Love is indeed over the hill and waiting for you!!
Dann

[The High Poet]

Very well written! I enjoyed reading it and can relate to the emotion in this poem. Thanks for sharing!

[Scissorhandds4eva<3]

i like it

[dina[saur]]

thanks girls that means a lot for me! just getting started and getting such great reviews! means a lot!

[cheeeeese]

For your first official piece, this is fantastic. I've never seen a piece that relates to a hall, it's a new take for me and I like it. I like the repitition of 'i sit in my hall', it emphasizes it alot and keeps my attention. Great job :)