Someone

Head in my hands
And heart in the trash
The scene so familiar
Just old and rehashed
All that I live for's
Just reasons to laugh
All that surrounds me's
All I can't have

A hundred, a thousand,
A million or more
Mocking faces
Knock me to the floor
The anguish, the pain,
Of faces that swore
To love me forever
Don't love anymore

'Cause all that I want
And all that I need
Is someone to be there
At all times for me
Someone, somehow
Who is able to see
The things that I am
And the things I could be

Someone that appreciates,
Somebody that cares
Someone that always
Tries to be there
Someone that looks past
The scars that I bear
And loves me for me
Not the mask that I wear

And it seems that they're always,
Always so near
But when I reach for them
They just disappear
And sometimes it seems
That the message is clear
I'll never have them
They'll never be here

Reviews

[Charles D. Moorer]

This is a very good piece, well written, very emotional, sad really. We all write from experience, to make sense of that experience, to make it more palatable. In the end, it is the quality of our response to dissapointment that makes us stronger. Again, a job well done. I promise I will read more of our work.

[kurrupted]

awesomely sad...this brother got skills, very relative, all humanoids fall into this soul torturing and wrecking pool.The way we respond and or cope to the whole situation is what differs....but pain is pain.

while i love the flow of the stanzas and that they very well connect....i dont seem to have a particular favourite part but if i am to start listing i'd start with the stanza below

'Cause all that I want
"And all that I need
Is someone to be there
At all times for me
Someone, somehow
Who is able to see
The things that I am
And the things I could be"

keep it coming bro...word!

[MadasonBlue]

One thing I think beginning poets get wrong is the religious-like belief that they HAVE to rhyme (I'm guilty of that myself). For you, though, the rhyme works and even adds to the message. This poem takes something familiar to most people--something familiar and yet sometimes undecipherable--and makes it easy to understand and relate and convey.

Wonderful poem.

Favorite parts:

"Someone that looks past
The scars that I bear
And loves me for me
Not the mask that I wear",

"And sometimes it seems
That the message is clear
I'll never have them
They'll never be here".

[Enthusiast]

Wow, D, that is a very powerful poem. It struck a deep chord within me. You were able to conjure a mood and an emotion that is very universal, without preaching.

The excerpt:
"The anguish, the pain,
Of faces that swore
To love me forever
Don't love anymore"
just floored me! There are precious few among us who cannot relate to that excerpt, or the poem as a whole. You have approached the subject matter beautifully.

There are a few meter and rhyme issues, but overall it is a wonderful piece of work. Thanks for sharing. Keep up the great work!

[Tallulah]

This is sad. Unfortuneately its so relateable for most people. But you write the truth however sad it is. This is written so beautifully though.
I love this.

[Emmie]

OMG!! I love this poem!!! You write like I do! This piece is perfect! I can feel what you felt when I read it! I can related too! I love it, I love it, I love it!!!