SuperNova

how am I going to put
this all back together
I slap pieces on and they don't stick
pick them up lick them up
stick them back doesn't matter

 

 yes it does it's all matter

some bunch of gases went all
super nova and here we are
the star is blown all out
of proportion the torsion causing shearing
it's appearing to be damaged
cells have clamored for assistance
but resistance is more than I can handle
lit a candle still the darkness
is a massive black hole
sucking all the light out
of the world is sky covered
cloud hovered galaxy smothered
in diamond starshot fabric bending
never lending an ear or a hand
I just stand and look up waiting
skating through the night
a ball of fright so tiny underneath
the heavens I would sing
the plangent tune of space time

 

subtle rhyme escapes

it winds around my throat
to silence questions with
no answers like the planets
in their orbit
through my veins corpuscles travel
routes unraveled slowly
predetermined til a single
singularity (not as much a rarity
as you might think)

takes everything to the brink
and then collapses into itself
like me I'm sinking under weight
of my own thoughts
I fought too hard I think

or not enough

this skin like space is bending
folding holding in the soul

 

but there are limits

I am in it but not staying
like the stars I am imploding
light exploding soon outshining
stellar pining for return to
source of course we argue
what that is but in the end we all
go back and fall into the core

becoming matter once again

the star stuff fading with the dawn
but what a journey to become
a softened color coated morning
where another will be looking to the sky
and wonder where am I and
do I fit here what's my bit here

are my cells a part of yours

and did I come from up above
will I return and burn as brightly
daily nightly ever slightly
changing to become
the sun

Author's Note

Posting as a test.

Reviews

[A. Z. Anthony]

Wow. I love the mix of rhyming, flow and metaphor. I feel each element is balanced nicely, none impeding on the other.
As well, I really enjoyed the mixture of scientific words and processes. It is rare to find a poem that proves mastery over the art of English and understanding of science to such a high degree. Nice.
I also loved how you tied the metaphor in to the poem at multiple points, and, in the end, brought the poem full circle back to where it began. Or, to where we can assume it began.
This was a very well written piece. Well done!
-A.Z.

[Rev. LeRoy James]

Exactly what are you testing?? ;)

This is utterly outstanding, the rhythm and flow of the lines, your alliteration and the rhymes are so originally done. I'm completely in love with stellar imagery and you have handled it beautifully!! Thanks for leaving this for me to discover!! Keep that ink flowing freely!!

[-Ink Artist-]

fabulous! everything about this is wonderful. the metaphor, the imagery, the alliteration & assonance. amazing work! so impressive. :)

~lori

[brandubh]

Nicely written and well constructed. Wonderful work my friend.

john

[ImagineItAll]

I literally felt dizzy while I was reading this, so I believe you have achieved something great!

[Poetic-Theorem]

You always amaze me Dee. You have such a unique way of making your poems flow, mixing in rhymes, it's like a stream on thoughts rolling so wonderfully off the tongue, I real delight to recite out loud. This is so metaphoric to so many things in life, I believe that all the readers can realte to this in his or her own way. I live in chaos a lot so it makes a lot of sense to me, I just love to see the sun rise, the sunset, and the stars at night, Wonderful work as always :) David *hug*

[TJ]

Very good piece you've out together here. I'm not sure what you mean by test but hopefully we've passed of if t was meant for you then you surely have. The imagery you paint and the journey you wind us through with this is great. And the omnipotent disconnected but connected voice of the italics adds a great feeling to it as well.
Good wrk

[MysticMirage]

Wonderful poem to be as your first uploaded piece here. I love what you've done with the italic one liners in between. Pretty descriptions and strong diction well done!

[Mickeyboi]

Nice Work, I love some of the images in this piece, particularly diamond starshot fabric, ha - great, the universe offers us broad meanings, this poem could be applied to nearly anything - well tested.
Mike

[Daytonight]

It is a great test. Kind of describes how I feel about what happened at AP! :D Keep on penning. :)