Her life

Her tears are breaking out
Her heart has been broken
She crys out for what was lost
In the beginning as the murder of her heart
Came from the most likely suspect
Her loss of love destroyed her very core
Abused to the point of being scared
She'll feel alone for the first time
She'll sit at the table
Dreading how she's going to tell him
Wondering if he'll try to kill her baby
Thinking of how she was raped
Lost in her own world
As she begins to cry
Who will help me now
She cries

Reviews

[brenda]

sad really sad but nice write liek how you wrote about this nice write really great poem :)

[Barbara Lynne]

such sadness along with fear and heartbreak...very well done!

[LeaflessTree]

Ah I like this :3

[Becky C Strukamp]

A very heart wrenching poem. The tragedy of such an act. I can feel the anguish, pain, and betrayal. You penned this tragedy very well.

[BrokenGirl]

This is a deep personal subject.
Lovely words

[Rai]

You've touched a very deep subject.
Though-provoking and sad.

[Bailey C. Writing]

This was...deep.
Heartbreaking, I got the saddest feeling. This is one of the saddest poems I've ever read

[Caitlin Lea]

Wow, some powerful emotion here. There is SO much potential here to really touch people, and make them CRY!! Reading over this a few times, I am wondering if it's written as a song? As a poem, I think the wording could perhaps be made to be more potent, but as a song, it seems to work a bit better.

One bit I particularly like is actually the very beginning; "Her tears are breaking out". That wording is quite good.

[Helpless]

wow..... this is me all the way.... don't ever think your alone when you feel this way.... i think we kind of all do

[Bianca La Salle]

completely heartbreaking,