A Typical Day In The Hood

Six o'clock in the morning

 

There's a cockroach crawling

 

On top of the kitchen ceiling

 

Near the new light fixture

 

Damn vacant buildings

 

On both sides of my house

 

Where the hell are they

 

Coming from?

 

Took out the trash

 

It was garbage night

 

Here in the hood

 

The damn things are crawling

 

On the sidewalk outside

 

They creep up my steps

 

Come in through the crevives

 

Of my screendoor

 

 Like they own the place

 

Time to exterminate again

 

Just a typical day

 

Here in the hood

 

Damn, here comes my feline

 

Bringing me a sewer rat

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Marie Anzalone]

I didn't catch despair.. I caught almost tongue-in-cheek sardonic wit. If I'm seeing cockroaches at 6:00 am... of course the cat's going to come home with a sewer rat next. Because that's what happens in the ghetto. Or is it? Are we really talking about cockroaches and rats here?

Nicely done!

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Six o'clock in the morning

There's a cockroach crawling


Hey! I liked this one..I mean this was very different, yet so strong and powerful :)
Great work!

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

A picture painted in my head of the harsh reality some of us have to endure. A very powerful and no punches held back sort of piece. You did a great job!!!

[BrightEyes]

You have captured much here - that sometimes life hands us circumstances beyond our control. In those instances we are left with doing what we can do - and coming to terms with what we cannot do. There is that feeling of despair here, but I think it is tempered with all those things that are being done to turn back the tide; keeping ahead of those blasted roaches. While no one is exactly thrilled with the present of a rat by our feline friends, that particular ending even - gives this piece that splash of hopefulness.

[Albert Freeman]

They do own the place, lol. You're just renting out to them. I know the feeling and age old battle of man vs cockroach. Clever b******s they are. Show them no mercy.

[Lizanne]

The atomic c**k roach! How aptly they and the sewer rat describe life in the hood. It is survival of the fittest. A ver true look at the sordid conditions that humans are expected to live within and still thrive. In todays world we do not have to live in the hood, they will gladly bring it to us and deposit it right next door. First brightly painted and glorified, then left to fester like an open and constantly running sore. Again you brought life to an amazing write.

[An owl on the moon]

Powerfully descriptive and emotionally stirring. Your words evoke such a presence of despair... as if it were alive in the hood. Amazing write.

[George Love]

Very real, very harsh and all too true. You brought us right into this world with this work, and we see the ugliness many deal with every day. Excellent work, very simply told!

[Fran Marie]

Ewww~ brutally raw in its truth and you say it so well in this descriptive piece ~

Thanks for sharing

[emmajoy]

A raw, cruel, vicious truth... what horrors. You certainly know how to bring us firmly feet to ground and be thankful for what we have.