The Lady In Red

 

The lady in red

 

Has caught his attention

 

He can't take his eyes off of her

 

On a cool autumn day

 

Walking to the bus stop

 

He sat down beside her

 

And he said

 

Hello lovely lady

 

Haven't we met before

 

She looked up at him

 

And she said

 

Yes I think we have

 

But I can' t recall where

 

It's a small town

 

We live in you know

 

Well I was watching you

 

From a distance

 

You looked so familiar to me

 

Then he chuckled and he said

 

Perhaps we had the same dream

 

Well she laughed and she laughed

 

He said I like your smile

 

And you have pretty eyes

 

I tell you no lies

 

I'm no stranger

 

I mean you no danger

 

Please do not be offended

 

Would you be so kind

 

As to have dinner with me

 

She looked up at him

 

With a silly grin and she said

 

I like your smile

 

And you have pretty eyes

 

I tell you no lies

 

I'm no stranger

 

I mean you no danger

 

Please do not be offended

 

If I say yes

 

I'd like to have dinner with you

 

Yes it's a small town

 

We live in you know

 

Perhaps we had the same dream

 

The lady in red

 

She caught his attention

 

He can't take his eyes off of her

 

 

 

Reviews

[Ralphy]

This is a very sweet poem, one that lends clarity to attraction and of course she sweet, and mesmerizing as she synchronizes everything with him, matching wits for wits. His clever lines are out of the typical clich� pick up lines but he sounds nervous, as I think he met his match. The flow of this poem is like butter slowly melting in a pan, soothing, creamy, and hot with anticipation. The structure and rhythm merge like a bridge across the ocean and the message swallows you whole.

[Puzzle-bot]

a beautifully sweet poem. it captured me fully.
'she looked up at him witha silly grin and she said'
DEFINATLY one of the best.

[Pj]

aww this is soooo SWEET! Very clever! I loved how you sneakily wove in repetition which clearly aided the poem's story furthermore! Lovely

[LSS]

Its like a lovely story, but you didn't finish it. There was surely more to tell. Of course you probably wanted to leave it to our imagination. But I'm lazy, and I like happy endings - tell on!
lar

[ANNA]

God this was AWESOME!!!! I could so read this over and over. Something I read in bed every night! Awwww this was sooo sweet and what a great poem...frrl like a lil story! Great write

Much love n respect,
Anna

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Very enchanting work... strangers on the verge of something special, very fun and lighthearted piece.

[The DuchessPoet]

This is what i read aloud to my friend!
And it is beautifhl!!

[Samuel Dickens]

I sure wish it had gone that easy for me when I was looking for a girl. Ahhh--romance.

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Touching encounter portrayed here. I would that it would be so easy to meet someone so seemingly tender. Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha

[melancholy]

this is very romantic and sweet-i love the story i think this is my favorite! it's like a short film love story and i saw the whole picture.it's perfect!

[Queen of wands]

I am inclined to comment on the picture you chose to accent this piece. I am a bit of an artist and the picture is inspiring in a way that wouldn't be without the poem. I am curious whether you chose the piece first or the picture. It is a charming write. Romantics, such as myself, can never get enough of the subject of the onset of a potential romance. This piece is elegantly written. I like the way it seems portray a message that speaks less of a story being told and more of a tribute to "the stories" that romantics like to tell of love.