Climbing To The Height Of My Desire For You

Climbing to the height of my desire for you

 

Climbing to the height of my desire for you I shall need

To find my way out of this horrid place

The stairway that I must climb is such a long way up

Height of which I seem to fall back one step forward two steps back

Of this place I am at I have hit rock bottom

My life is at stake and I

Desire for so much more than this

For to be able to come out of this dark cold celler and to find my way to

You as you are the only glimmer of light in my darkest hour

Reviews

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

The hope is strong in this piece, no matter how much we have to face and it keeps trying to keep us back down we keep the hope alive. This is a great write.

[Michael]

Often people don't know how to review poems with a darker feel to them. Perhaps due to them cutting too close to emotions held depth within. I think that is what gives them strength by forcing the reader to think. In you work here there is little room for doubt about the state of mind you present. It is dark but yet the desire for something more from life still comes through. You have crafted an entire story in a few lines.

Well done.

[Suelou]

I sure know how this feels.

[George Love]

Harsh reality here. Well imaged and stated!

[Samuel Dickens]

This sounds like another variation of "the blues." Crying out from a depressed place of saddness.

[bluessadmood]

very nice you climbed from the dark you said hoping to see the light ,for to you its the light of him you stepped up and almost fell,its like shaking steps,you want to catch up with him for he is the light that will shine on your loving heart ,you pulled all together so nicely ,wonderful ,i am always glad to read you

[Deborah Shepard]

bravo beauty at its best you are a wounderful writer

[Blue Sky]

Oh wow, that is got to be one of the hardest pieces read
to feel the rock bottom and compare it in the way
the one that left you, the concrete stairs has really set the mood
and tone of your great written piece, I thought you did a rather
magnificent job in writing this with emotions flowing through
Excellent write!!