Serenity

(for a contest) 40/10

the smell of scented perfume

placed a splendid aroma in the air

lovely presence of you and me

lost in oblivion

purer than snow

a looking glass

azure blue sky

a serene setting

two lovers entwined

so merciful are we

Reviews

[Christopher Marlowe]

Some advice...

Don't put the same word in two consecutive lines. There are plenty of other possibilties for "Scent".

Also, the correct words are "splendid" and "entwined."

Oblivion doesn't make a great deal of sense because it implies being forgotten, but this poem is all about remembering.

CM

[emmajoy]

Your 10/40 falls into the contest with true skill, you've used the words so well. Good luck

[Helena]

Lovely Debiliah. A very worthy addition to the 10/40 contest.
These are not easy to do, but you have done a good job!
I liked your use of the 10 words very much.

~ Helena ~

[Tovli]

a really good 10.40; it reads like a still photo--you've produced a significant amount of emotion in as few words as possible--a romantic impact and sense of belonging was the result. nicely done. tovli

[April Child]

Lovely snapshot of a special moment.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Very sweet and captivating piece... short but full of emotion, beautiful work.

[The Poor Man's Poet]

This is a wonderful write, I was looking to do something
like this myself. Or I should say do more writting like this.

[Leah]

placed a splended scent in the air

lovely presence of you and me

lost in oblivion

.. my favorite part!! LOVE this. why so short?
but it's excellent all the same! :)