Fireworks!

i like the you make me smile

the gentle touch of your hands

the softness of your skin against mine

this i remember from time to time

just want to thank you for surprising me

when you showed up at my door

standing there so debonair

sitting and talking upon my front porch

remonising the memories we made

rekindling a fire a burning desire

just thinking about you

on this 4th of july evening

as i recall the fireworks between you and i

hoping perhaps you'll surprise me again

for we are more than lovers we are good friends

i miss being held in your arms so tight

wish you were here kissing me tonight

 

Reviews

[*~Imperfectly Me~*]

So beautiful! It shows alot of emotions and it speaks so much of love... This is a great piece, flowed wonderfully as usual... Great piece.

[Lyndsay Castro]

This is really beautiful and full of sincere sentiment. The hope and the nostalgia are great tools that you used here. It's like being there, feeling what you feel. I think that's what we all strive for as writers.

[Carole]

And the fireworks are on:


rekindling a fire a burning desire

just thinking about you

on this 4th of july evening

as i recall the fireworks between you and i

hoping perhaps you'll surprize me again

for we are more than lovers we are good friends

i miss being held in your arms so tight

wish you were here kissing me tonight


Who says they only come once a year? Beautifully written! XO Carole

[Cordell]

Thanx for reviewing Resuscitate Me, it was lyrics to a song in my mind! Thanx and btw I LOVE this poem. It's more than fireworks, more of a fantasy boy I would love 2 be in, thanx for taking me there peace & stay safe...

[ganymeder]

What a lovely poem.

[Suelou]

Abeautifull love poem.

[Justin Tobey]

Great! You can feel the love in this poem very clearly, and I liked this line in particular:

"for we are more than lovers we are good friends"

I think lovers also being friends is very important. Great job!

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

Wow this is so sweet and perfectly expressed. I could feel the love in these words. Got a few typos but I wouldn't change a word. Excellent write.