The Edge

deep dark blue ocean

crashing waves

sailboat for a ship

dolphins and killer whales

edge of the earth

held up by the gods

their voices in the winds

leading me to explore

the vastness of the world

in search of my true love

a small white dove

a message in a bottle

sailing on through the storm

exploring faraway lands

reaching out for my destiny

finding my fate

my ship just capsized

afloat on a raft

no one in sight

to rescue me

prey to the sea

as it swallows me

Reviews

[Justin Tobey]

Wonderful poem! I really got the sense of being small in a big world, ready to explore new places. I liked these two lines a lot:

"Edge of the earth
held up by the gods
their voices in the winds"

Excellent

[Sarah]

This was fantastic! XD I loved reading it so much. I love the journey it takes you from adventerous to pure horror at the idea of being stranded in the ocean. Definitely both sides of the ocean - both the beauty and the fear that it's capable of holding. I loved the lines "edge of the earth / held up by the gods" epic imagery! (: And also the final lines "prey to the sea / as it swallows me". Wonderful! That really made the poem for me. (: I really enjoyed the occasional rhyme as well, though I'm not sure if it was even intentional XD, but either way it made the poem flow really well. Great job with this! =)

[Nick Erickson]

I got more from this than just sadness.
I saw a sense of adventure, an opportunity opening up.
The title alone gives one a feeling of setting out for an unknown destination, waiting to see just how far they can go before going over the "Edge".
Well done!!

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Very sad, I can sense the desperation in this piece. Wonderfully written. Great Write.

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A very sad ending for so much hope; hope, dismay, desperation and then surrender. A well written poem . Thank you for sharing.

[wizthom]

such a haunting thrilling beautiful write u wrote about the feeling i have now,,thank u for ur inspiration,,

please read one is sad the others is going insane..we must have been composing at the same time..peace wizthom

[RHEA CROSLEY]

A pungent but necessary description of desperate helplessness. If it is "darkest before the dawn" you must be getting closer to sunrise. Thanks I appreciate your writing and descriptive ability.

[Denny]

So much energy and adventure for such a sad ending. I thought it could flow a little smoother but then again there isn't smooth sailing out on the edge. I enjoyed the read.

[Carole]

How often all of us have felt this way. I don't think there's a single soul that hasn't been there, my friend. I love how you built up to the capsizing of the ship. Well done. :-)