Mona Lisa lost her smile

M ona Lisa lost her smile

O n a foggy moonlit evening

N ot a soul in sight

A ll alone she sat and cried

 

L ittle did she know

I  was watching in the distance

S tanding in the shadows

A s I watched her cry

 

L ittle did she know

O f the times I saw her there

S itting beneath that weeping willow tree

T oo many times I saw my Mona Lisa break down in tears

 

H er smile turned into a frown

E ven the the stars seem to fall from the sky when ere she cries

R eturn a smile to my Mona Lisa's lips I surely would if I could

 

S uch a sad lady as she weeps for her lost lover

M y heart it aches for her as I stand amidst the shadows

I  wish that I could comfort her and hold her in my loving arms

L onging that I might be the one to make my Mona Lisa smile once again

E ventually she might notice me standing here in the shadows

Reviews

[Rain]

Is this about your daughter? Beautiful, regardless. Rain..

[Tina]

very beautiful debileah...its such a wonderful concept. Great piece of work!

[Arthur Henn]

Superb! It would be nice to see you compile these into a book. They are an art of their own and you my dear are the master behind the brush of the pen.

Well done

Art

[George Love]

Nicely done. You take us right into the heart of your topic quickly and you do not release us until the end.

[DrumMajorPod]

Wow. It seems like I was there. I think someone else mentioned that too--it seems like we are right there with you, observing the same things that you are observing.

As far as the structure goes, I enjoyed the space after the first letter of every line. That really emphasizes the fact that those letters are significant, which is proven as you read the letters from top to bottom. Excellent planning on your part.

What a unique, original idea. I have never had the pleasure of reading anything that was even moderately similar to this. Great work!

[Brianna Brie]

Awesome work. Where ever do you come up with so many ideas? Once again you are thinking outside the box. Wonderful flow...oh the way you tell the story just sucks you right in. Bravo!!

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Another clever acrostic, written with wonderful wording. Thank you for sharing

[D Poet K]

i suppose you do most if not all poems the way you did this one huh? at least everyone i've read has been like this. yet again, another good poem though.

[Constance]

Creative construction, and nice imagery. It is as though we are watching her with you.