Can you forgive me

Seven times seventy

Can you forgive me

For loving you

For being blue

For the first time

I walked into

That karaoke bar

For the presence that I felt

From across that neon room

 

Seven times seventy

Can you forgive me

Your eyes met mine

For the very first time

Those eyes of emerald green

Such a strange familiar feeling

Came over me

Had we ever met before

Do you recall the dress I wore

As I danced across that floor

 

Seven times seventy

Can you forgive me

What is your excuse

Shall we call a truce

I've been down this road before

I've felt like this somewhere before

Roll the dice and treat me nice

Roll seven and eleven

I'll meet you in heaven

Reviews

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This poem is specatacular really! I really like your rhyming here and meter. It's good to be reminded of the verse "Seventy times seven." The dice at the end are a contrast to the verse, I do feel the last 3 lines do not belong in some way. It is my own personal feeling. Great writing!!

[Jessi]

WOW not suprising but another great write you have a wonderful talent i enjoy reading your work