The pain of my lonely nights

T he old piano stands in the corner silently waiting to be played

H ours have passed since his fingers touched the keys in sweet melodies

E vening has come as darkness fills the oddly empty room

 

P ain in my heart for I am left devastated at what has occurred

A s the pain of my heart beats on to a solemn tune

I  am so envious of his

N ew lover

 

O ut the blue he whispered her name

F or my delicate ears to hear

 

M y heart is left shattered and torn

Y elling at him as he stormed out the door, he's left me for her

 

L onliness surrounds me

O n all sides

N o where to run and no where to hide
E vening has come
L onely am I

Y esterday we were so blissfully in love

 

N ight falls and now he is gone forever
I  sit at the piano stool gently stroke the ivory keys as I weep
G oodbye my lover, goodbye
H ow long shall I cry over you
T il the ends of time
S oul deep is my broken heart

Reviews

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Oh! This is so beautiful..
I mean I don't have words...
I would love if you enter this in my contest

Pain of my lonely nights...May 6, 2008 - Jun 1, 2008


This is so painful and I personally felt so strong with this one..This is like exactly what I feel..
You are really master of words.. This is really "THE BEST" writing I've ever read here on writer's cafe..
Brilliant..Awesome..
:) :)

[Kelley Pascoe]

I love this type of poetry and I have wrote a few like it. Your words flowed like wine and it mad the reader feel like they were missing something in life? Love,friendship,heart break can kill a person but it also can make them stronger.
Great write!!! Thanks for sharing.

Kelley Frost

[Michael]

A very beautiful acrostic. You show just now nice the form can be. I see no line at all that seems "made" to fit as it flows as well as any traditional work.

Great job.

[ShanZ-Turn]

This was wonderful. I had to read it over again, just to try and find one thing to comment on for improvement ;)

My favorite part was
L onliness surrounds me
O n all sides
N o where to run and no where to hide

the only thing i would even think of changing would be the
N ew lover
but that's just because i always try to come up with on thing at least for each item I read... and this was the only line that i could see being improved on, only because it is so short, it seems a bit abrupt compared with the flow of the rest of the poem...
Great write..

[Jessi]

This touched me and brought a tear I have been there before and this write spoke to me

[Seriana]

What a very lovely and deeply meaningful acrostic!! I love reading your writing, it's so pretty. This one was especially sad because of the message. Good job!

[Cordell]

Me likey! Nicely written and especially how u made it spell out The pain of my lonely nights ;) great write keep it up can't wait to read another one!