Beauty in the darkness

(for a contest, my first attempt at dark poetry)

 

There is beauty in the darkness

Strolling through this enchanted forest

 

A mystical full moon on a starlit night

Captivated by it's eerie light

 

Bewitched I stand in awe

Gazing into the reflection

 

Of a serene and flowing pond

An awkward built wooden bridge

 

Crosses over the water

Captured by the breath taking view

 

 Hauntingly a castle stands

In the distance upon a craggy hill

 

Statues of gargoyles guarding 

 Vast stone laden walls

 

There are bats soaring round

Mighty towers reaching up into a foggy sky

 

There is beauty in the darkness

Of this magically enchanted evening

 

A gentle breeze brushes my shoulder creepily

 An icy chill runs down my spine

 

Whimsical hauntings of ghosts

   Speak of the castle's tragic past

 

 Dancing in the fortress of my mind

Recalling the tales of old

 

Where deep within the chamber walls

They say a lonely soldier's ghost still cries

 

 Over the death of his lovely young bride

Her lifeless body they found floating

 

 Downstream in the serenely flowing pond

Near the awkward wooden bridge

 

They say she still haunts the woods

Wandering aimlessly in search of her lost love

 

Yes there is beauty in the darkness

As I tenderly place a kiss upon my lonely soldier's lips

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Puzzle-bot]

Wow. a beautifull piece. I'm not very into dark stuff but this really captured me.
'a gentle breeze brushes my sholdier creepily,
a icy chill went down my spine'
it's a magical, chilling piece. I told you I didn't like dark stuff; And this wont change how I feel, but I will most defitatly make an exeption.

[Christopher 'Windstorm'..]

hmmmm.... interesting, it feels very forced.

[Gema]

WOW THIS IS A STUNNER IT HITS U HARD I LOVE THIS SO MUCH DEB U WRITE SO BRILLANT WELL DONE X

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

Another mystical piece, Hmmm!

A mystical full moon on a starlit night
Captivated by it's eerie light

Excellent use of words. Very creative write.

[Cece]

the imaginary is beautiful
amaze beauty from the darkness
sends my mind on tangents
what beauty can be had

love can not be lost wit death
so where does it go

[LadyLove]

Ok...the surpise ending...she's a ghost...eeee... (one thing...reflection is missing a letter, that's it!) A haunting look at a ghostly pair of eye's perspective. Aww...she found him...I hope her kiss opens his eyes to join her in this beautiful darkness walk she takes..kinda like a reversed sleeping beauty! Hmm.. a nice poem!

[Lyndsay Castro]

I really, really love this piece. I love the mideval quality to it, that's one of my favorite genres. And you bring the entire thing full circle, which is a great touch. It's romantic and haunting, a great combination.

[facadeofshadows]

I'm not a great reviewer of poetry, but I just had to comment on the imagery of this piece. It was beautiful and vivid!

[L.G. Knight]

Nice twist at the end I loved that nicely done!

~Frances~

[Seriana]

Dang girl!!! That's what I'm talking about! First try? Hum...you sound like an expert! Thanks for your entry. This is going to be a difficult contest to judge!