Pretty

 

You’re a pretty girl without and a pretty girl within

I want to kiss your cheek and gently touch your skin

There’s something cool about you I must comprehend

All I want to know is will you be my friend?

Deep conversation is essential to seduction

Without communication nothing else can function

I can not think of a decent introduction

I’m overwhelmed by a sense of compunction

You’re like a peasant with the body of a goddess;

Intimidating though your attitude is modest

What do I say that doesn’t sound obscene?

Do I smell good, and are my nostrils clean?

I shouldn’t stare, I might seem a creep

But you’re so hot I’ll see you in my sleep

I hope you appreciate my tenacity

If I said ‘hi’ would you talk to me?

Reviews

[Emily B]

You are something else. A real work of art. I've read several of your pieces this morning. I'm impressed with you.

[topsyturvy]

i agree with everything that they said..;) it's simple, yet catchy. perfection in all honesty..:)

[SN]

Yes the rythme is outstanding. I love the smooth flow of it, you say it simply yet you say so much. The length of this piece is just perfect too. The message is clearly conveyed.

[Leran Vakem]

This poem brings back memories from past and the future, the rhythm is outstanding. I can see myself in this poem, seeing that someone you like for the first time, and words escape my mouth. For some reason it brought the song "She's so high" to mind.
Well done
Leran Vakem

[wicked.wanderer]

I love it..
Your sense of rhythm is superb, which instantly makes it a winner in my book.
The imagery is simple, and the words convey the message flawlessly.

[Pointblank]

pure and honest. I like it.