we lie sometimes

laying is for liars

woke up cold one Sunday
and abruptly realized
it's been minutes,
it's been days
really, all I can remember

since we've been together,
u n a b r i d g e d
but even when I'm with you,
I miss you
treat me like a stolen glance

eventually you, yes,
even you admit you feel
"there's something in that mess"
so slow down, lie down
let our intentions drop to the floor

chest to chest, feet to feet
embrace our lonely struggles
caress our skin, we're alive
convince our souls
love is all we need
love is all but free

Author's Note

first nearly complete piece I've written in a long time

Reviews

[Bennett Logan]

Good stuff. There's a real sense of resignation in this poem, and I like that. It feels real. My only suggestion, if you're interested in revising, would be to incorporate more imagery to paint a picture of what it's like to be lonely in the presence of a signifigant other. But what you have here is great, and you definately get your point across well. Keep up the good work!

[Butterflymom]

Nice write! I enjoyed reading it, and loved the simplicity of it. I liked the line ..." since we've been together, unabridged". Very nicely done...keep up the great writing.

[deathcabxcutiex]

thanks. not much, only one.

[Girl, Interrupted]

i recognized some song lyrics in this. nice.