diagnosed with paramnesia

inspired by Jenny Lewis' "Rabbit Fur Coat" CD

What you know you have
or what you think,

you aren't.
It's never perfect

And this is no great illusion.
When I'm with you

I feel I'm looking for a ghost
Or invisible reasons
To fall out of love.

But you are what you love
And not what loves you back
I'm in love with illusions
So saw me in half
I'm in love with tricks, Borden,
So pull another rabbit out of your hat

Author's Note

okay, 86ed the first stanza and fiddled with the rest... still feels a bit lacking.

Reviews

[w. r.]

interesting work...i liked it...

[Girl, Interrupted]

so i just reread this and thought it was brilliant, forget what i said. i did like the change of color for the letters in "ghost". good yob, im adding it to my favorites

[A.M. Nelson]

the ghost/invisible- well, sure it looks cool but I think its a bit obvious and I find myself wondering as to the nature of 'invisible reasons'...seems like bad abstraction to me.
Maybe ditch the full-stop at the end of the first stanza. And decap a few words.

The only part which actually works for me is the third stanza which is well written and gets to the actual heart of what you wanted to say with this.

[Gastroc.]

i actually really like this.

[Este]

i think i'd have to listen to the cd to really get it, but it seems a little forced. interesting idea though.

[Girl, Interrupted]

didnt think the stanzas flowed altogether, seemed kind of piece-y. i did really like the last stanza though.

[A.M. Nelson]

you need to rewrite the 2nd line.