I thought of this poem while I was walking through one of my fields slapping mosquitos. It's not very good, and suggestions of how to make it better would be awesome. Thanks so much for your reviews, and taking the time to read it!
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This feels like the sort of poem that should rhyme, for example:
Slap, Slap,
hand on arm.
Fly, Fly,
They begin to swarm...
Yeah, I'm not too good at poetry either.
there are some elements that I really like about it though, the repetitive patterns at the beginning of each stanza. that's cool. and how the last stanza is the same as the first, implying that the whole cycle starts over again.
Where unicorns roam wild, dragons soar overhead, and pickles sing
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