Bad Love Gone Good

 

Standing in the middle of this rainstorm

is like feeling a thousand feathers falling against my skin

when I know heaven is breathing down my neck.

I never knew how good

an angel could be when she goes bad

till I tempted her with the purity of my lust.

Darkened clouds may dampen the earth

but we stay floating on drenched skin

by means of inflated sin.

So let the world drown in this epic storm,

we’ll use it as a chance to swim

into the darkest depths of love.

Reviews

[Hayley]

First off, I love the rainstorm compared to feathers. You really set us up for the whole "bad gone good" theme. I also liked "purity of my lust" because it's kind of a rough contradiction, isn't it? Daring.
The repetition of the clouds and the rainstorm followed by the "inflated sin" just really tie the second half of the poem with the first!
Excellent work, really! I appreciate poetry that focuses on one thing to express a complex idea, rather than one which dresses up with a ton of metaphors and mumbo jumbo.
Whenever I read your work, it's like I imagine you as a once epic song writer/rock star, only put into a different lifestyle :)

[Muse]

You've reversed it all:
The sons of God saw that the daughters of men were beautiful, and they .... And the angels, the children of the heaven, saw and lusted after the

Clever you are...this would create an epic storm indeed!

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is amazing. When a woman allow you in and she showed you the glory of her touch and emotion. Can be best days of a man's life. I like the way you made your desire point in this poem. No weakness in this outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

I never knew how good an angel could be when she goes bad.........mmmmm love this line and it is the truth. Well done :)

[Seashell]

remind me never to take my umbrella with me, ever again.

great

Thank you xx

[Another Relic]

Love the comparisons and the way you tied it all together. Great.

[Brianna Brie]

Sexy is a good word for this poem! Yes, yes, sexy!

[Betweenthekeys]

Very sexy...Love, especially "Bad Love" is seductive and daring...your poem makes that point.

[emmajoy]

Wonderful post, one of your best and I've read so many of your bests, Dale. The way you've described this love is original and romantic and more than warm - and, most of all, your words are beautiful: 'So let the world drown in this epic storm, ~ we’ll use it as a chance to swim ~ into the darkest depths of love.

[anne p. murray- LadeeAn..]

Pure poetic heat, bliss and oh... the wondrous nature of love and passion

[Larry Dyson]

wow! @ hayley ..she really nails thesereview things...