Fine Line

 

Sipping slowly

to savor the flavor

only to choke on the taste

of the fruits of my labor.

 

So…

 

I look out the window

that is clearer than hindsight

only to see a blue sky

through scratched lenses.

 

Then…

 

Laying down in bed

so I can find a new dream

only to wake in agony

from the pleasure I see.

 

Now..

 

My mind is on the edge

of philosophical madness

searching for the perfection

within imperfection.

Reviews

[Katchzen]

Those first four lines are going to be stuck in my head for awhile. Quite awhile, I'm sure. It makes me think...We're all trying to get what we want in life, trying to work towards some kind of goal, but what if we're heading in the wrong direction and we don't even know it? Reaching for something that's actually behind us without even knowing? What happens if we get to the end and we think "This isn't what I wanted at all"?

One of the things I love about your writing is that I always end up with something to think about, even if it probably wasn't what you intended.

[Angel Bird]

Dale this is exquisite! A real little delicacy, so funny to read, made me smile, but then at the second look it reveals a very depth and true sadness...

I love these lines, they are so perfect in their 'imperfection'! Fabulous!

[The Analog Kid]

Dale, this is good. I mean good. The scratched lenses. The themes that you set as opposing yet one eclipses the other, then one cuts through the other. The way it keeps bouncing back and forth in your mind. Actually, I could write a lot more, but nice job.

[Brette Medb]

This is how I feel every night as I lay and stare up at the ceiling. Another great poem, if not a little daunting at the fact that apparently others feel the same way haha. Oh well here's to hoping that one day I'll get that philosophical madness out of the way and be purely perfect. HA :)

B

[Rossen]

clean and clear look into the fine point this pen

[Ladysue]

That standard to which we can sometimes hold ourselves' perfection...we are all imperfect, but all we can do it strive to fill our dreams to the best of our ability...this is thought provoking and i think many people at some point in there life hit that fine line and question so many things...good work...

[A. Fischer]

Interesting write with a well fitting title!

searching for perfection
within imperfection

I've come to the conclusion that perfection is merely an illusion. :)