Under Appreciated Spring

Written on a whim

The howls are more intense

as the lunar magnatism

becomes more intimate then ever.

Suddenly her cries

are more than

the pillow can handle

and the bed becomes

a river of loves neglect.

Everyone who has had a hand

in tainting the cloud she floated on

will feel the storm

of a thousand Aprils

till they drown in sorrow.

Reviews

[SpokenWord]

Sounds like she is preparing a salty dish of revenge on some people. Her will is deliberate as you paint this picture in poetic versus that streams the feeling of the rise and fall of her by others hands. It is a long way down from the pedelstole that men place women on. Great write.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

excellent reshaping~ the touch of human character blends flawlessly~

[My Fair Lady]

Your personified spring is just beautiful. You and your whims.. :)

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

Turned be a beautiful poem. Well written, thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Tina Kline]

Quite passionate in a tortured sort of way. No one likes to be ignored. This is really great, glad you went with that whim!

[An owl on the moon]

Quite a wondrous whim you had. Overwhelming sadness streams down in the darkest of days. Can feel it.. maybe too much.

[Liza]

this is so beautiful and sad; an empathetic expression of mother nature's movements and lack of recognition

[Lilly Negoi]

this is the kind of poem from which i cannot extract a line to claim to be my favorite. because the whole poem stands as a whole, and because if i extracted such a line the entire poem would be less in meaning and the line itself wouldn't be underlined enough...therefore i'll just express my admiration by adding this to my favorites...

[?]

(Whim is good)
lol
This is an awesome piece, loved it
We must remember though April showers bring May flowers
:D

[cilla]

This is an awesome piece! You should follow your instincts and whims all of time. Down in the sorrows of a thousand Aprils ... awesome. In the "Wasteland", TS Elliot wrote that "April is the cruelest month" and you've captured that feeling here.