Under Appreciated Spring

Under Appreciated Spring

A Poem by The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)
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Written on a whim

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The howls are more intense

as the lunar magnatism

becomes more intimate then ever.

Suddenly her cries

are more than

the pillow can handle

and the bed becomes

a river of loves neglect.

Everyone who has had a hand

in tainting the cloud she floated on

will feel the storm

of a thousand Aprils

till they drown in sorrow.

© 2011 The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)


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Sounds like she is preparing a salty dish of revenge on some people. Her will is deliberate as you paint this picture in poetic versus that streams the feeling of the rise and fall of her by others hands. It is a long way down from the pedelstole that men place women on. Great write.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Ooohhhh. Relentless, scorned woman. This yells out in vivid detail. Oh yes, I and prob. many women can relate to the anguish her heart speaks of. This poem has such powerful metaphores. Elegantly written...as usual

Posted 13 Years Ago


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and she takes her time in her revenge..nice..should continue this

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I can really picture the scene you've set before me. And the power of her anger!
Great as usual.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Wow! Very good! I was expecting some seasonal ballad but was hit with this powerful write of love and loss and scorn. Beautifully done!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Captivating. I like the way this piece magnetizes the reader's soul. At least that's what it felt like when I was reading it, in the sense that as a writer, you allow your readers to become a part of the whole experience.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Oh my! Tears well up when one reads words like this, pain runs so deeply. I see your poem as being about repeated indifference, neglect, maybe cruelty, and the point where there has to be revenge. 'She floated on ..' suggests someone who was gentle and frail who now has to retaliate for all the hurt she's endured at someone else's hands. It's like an ancient myth ..

Posted 13 Years Ago


Awesome write! Awesome title! Very well written piece that touched me, left me in deep thought.

Posted 13 Years Ago


oh gosh.. this is visceral poetry at its best.

Suddenly her cries
are more than
the pillow can handle
and the bed becomes
a river of loves neglect.

that punched me so hard my eyes welled up.. f*****g incredible.

Posted 13 Years Ago


So sad! I can relate to this .. the lines storm of a thousand Aprils .. till they drown is sorrow is so very good .
Enjoyed this though it is a sad one.

Chloe

Posted 13 Years Ago


this starts off strong and keeps going. passionate and I agree with Selene 'the touch of human character blends flawlessly' the last two lines are fantastic...you did an excellent job...

Posted 13 Years Ago



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The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)
The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)

It's better to be dead and cool than alive and uncool



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Birth name: Dale Deadmond Born November 20th, 1969 Metaphorically speaking music is my BFF and poetry is my soulmate. This is my world of my favorite poets are E.A. Poe, Dylan Thomas, R.. more..

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