When Happy Endings Are Grey

a white boy's rambling rap.

 

 

A hypocritical oath

From society’s scapegoat

Choking on the words

Not meant to be heard.

 

Cheers will be amended

Fear to be commended

Pain is the logical way

When salvation sways.

 

Emotions now earth tones

Like graves of the unknown

Paid the price deleting dreams

With sticks ‘n’ stone schemes.

 

Following the yellow brick road

Won’t bring Dorothy home

At least not in one piece

Now that Toto’s a disease.

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Sad, sad .. shadowy dreams and hope diluted. If i've understood this rightly, you're talking about the sense of abandonment and disillusionment caused by society in general; its turning on itself.

That lovely 'over the rainbow' dream ruined, ' Paid the price deleting dreams ~ With sticks ‘n’ stone schemes.

Deep stuff, Dale .. and worth thinking about.

[Cherrie Palmer]

I like the open ending which makes everyone put there on spin on it,

[Liza]

when you described this as a white boy's rambling i read this in the "eminem" voice....

[just rose.]

good job with rhyme here, and a really interesting message.

[The Analog Kid]

A little "Oz" in there adds a nice touch. The third stanza really hits home. Cool ending too!

[Marie Harrison]

I'm a huge Wizard of Oz fan, so of course I love the last stanza. But what happened to poor Toto? Ha! Love it!

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Wonderful metaphors .. extremely well written on this one, Dale.
Love that you have used the yellow brick road , Dorothy and Toto..
Very good imagery.

Love this verse:

"Emotions now earth tones

Like graves of the unknown

Paid the price deleting dreams

With sticks ‘n’ stone schemes."

[jenniewren (J.W. Bouwma..]

Paid the price deleting dreams
With sticks ‘n’ stone schemes

love the imagery in that couplet..

[Narnie]

We all feel pretty let down as a society - regardless of our nationality. This global f-up is surely criminal, somewhere along the line? Good rant cowboy. You've got me thinking all poetic. Thank you. :)

[Ladysue]

What a title...very good...as is this piece. creatively done...very strong opening...good work...

[Poetic Beauty]

This shows many problems in society. I love the creativity that used to convey the message in this poem.