When Happy Endings Are Grey

a white boy's rambling rap.

 

 

A hypocritical oath

From society’s scapegoat

Choking on the words

Not meant to be heard.

 

Cheers will be amended

Fear to be commended

Pain is the logical way

When salvation sways.

 

Emotions now earth tones

Like graves of the unknown

Paid the price deleting dreams

With sticks ‘n’ stone schemes.

 

Following the yellow brick road

Won’t bring Dorothy home

At least not in one piece

Now that Toto’s a disease.

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Sad, sad .. shadowy dreams and hope diluted. If i've understood this rightly, you're talking about the sense of abandonment and disillusionment caused by society in general; its turning on itself.

That lovely 'over the rainbow' dream ruined, ' Paid the price deleting dreams ~ With sticks ‘n’ stone schemes.

Deep stuff, Dale .. and worth thinking about.

[Rita L. Sev]

A hypocritical oath
From society’s scapegoat...

Every week there is a new one to listen to, blah blah blah... We are fed such a load of deceit from media, society, each other... and just when we think we will make it to the "Promised Land", they look at us and decide we don't deserve it after all...

Thought-provoking and deep, Dale...

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Yes you are so correct, we are feed so much B.S. we might as well be mushrooms.
Thank you.

[Chris]

Not so rambling at all... nor afterall

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Why thank you sir.

[Sorry Infamous]

I hate to be like everybody else but it is true. The ending knocked my socks off. It was so sharp and cutting. A perfect ending to this sad poem. Your thoughts flow so poignantly in this piece. Thanks for sharing.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very kindly.

[Peejay]

Love this! The last verse really hit the nail on the head.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much.

[Emily B]

this set me off on a thousand different roads

thank you

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you... I hope you have enough personalities to cover them all, LOL

[Emily B]

if i take to the skies, maybe i can follow several at once :)

[anne p. murray- LadeeAn..]

I was solemnly reading, thinking as I read, about as you say: "society's scapegoat", That really clicked in my head about how human society has become so narcissistic, greedy and selfish, sometimes with little concern for our fellow man.
Then the ending , it kind of rocked my boat, it was so unexpected after reading the 1st three paragraphs...... I loved it

[Maggie]

Again, great ending line...you use simple visionary principles to create poetry, but you feed off others emotions instead of your own...make me feel something

[An Ordinary Woman]

poor dorothy! poor toto! A great lil rap tho!

[Jenny Nelson]

"Following the yellow brick road
Won’t bring Dorothy home
At least not in one piece"

Indeed not. Refusing to look past the surface and act, put ourselves out, whether it's for ourselves or for others, can kill spiritually and physically. An excellent write.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

powerful poetic sway~ and my goodness~that last stanza is a beautiful killer~