A Sacred Haunting

 

She calls my name with sincerity,

My feet are blocks of solid fear.

 

She cries out my name with hope,

My arms are heavy with doubt.

 

She screams my name with desperation,

My reflection is tinted by lies.

 

She is the ghost

That haunts my grave.

 

Reviews

[Jenny Nelson]

Wow. So few words yet so many images and thoughts. Regrets of what could've or should've been given, or perhaps what someone needed that you just couldn't offer. Maybe even the "ghost" was the one that was unreasonably expectiong too much or being unrealistic making the other person feel guilty eventhough they weren't. Very unsettling feeling with this. Excellent piece!

[Brianna Brie]

This is awesome. She sounds like one hell of a ghost. You managed to put strong images into so few words. Kudos!

[Belinda Rice]

Wow have not seen your work in a long time...This is a great poem very well done..Cant wait to see me koodo's to you...

[Liza]

every line triggers intense thought...and the last 2 just leave my mouth open....leaves me wondering - very mystical

[T]

oh I could step in your poem and feel my own longing to unite despite fear and the times where I reached out to another who feared....

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thats a little spooky to say the least..expect the metaphor tells a story that is personal..this has undertones of relationships and heartbreak lovely work

[Norma M Sutton]

I love this Dale. Flip sides of the same coin.

[An owl on the moon]

This seems to move so deeply into the psyche... painfully voiced in a desparate distance from love and life.. Stunning imagery.

[Narnie]

It's a sway of two beliefs never meeting. Very atmospheric, cowboy. I think you're liking this darker tone.

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This is really good, great imagery. hmmmm
Fears of commitment or is it trust, fear of being hurt once again. wow , can relate with this one so much.
Wonderful piece Cowboy

[Cherrie Palmer]

You play the contrasting thoughts against each other in a very productive manner. I really enjoy the flow of this poem and the story it weaves.