Mountainization

Ever since I saw Country Strong this piece began to grow in my head. Now it is time for it to blossom.

 

I always had a firm grip on reality

Till I washed my hands in the golden sea,

Not realizing it was the suns reflection

Making it seem so pure.

My grasp was weakened

         Like watered down bourbon…

 

The fall broke my back

Cause a piece of straw

Isn’t enough cushion

For the psychological impact.

 

The crack in my back

         Wasn’t paralyzing

                  Just immobilizing enough

 

For me to use the earth’s resources

To make my way into a hole

Like a snake in the grass

Seeking protection.

 

Eventually time spent

Below the living

Made me respect the mountain

And why it connects me to heaven.

 

The climb was not easy with

Broken wings

But when I reached the top

I was destined to fly.

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Wonderfully deep and thoughtful words, Dale. You go through pitfalls and sadness, then, strike out for the specials: hope, freedom, love .. a precious beautiful place - perhaps inside of you, in your heart and mind. I could be wrong but it's how I interpret your beautiful poem.

[Cocoacandy]

wow.. really good poem... loved the images it caused me to feel, and the reaction it gave me... good write! keep it up!
*cocoabean*

[Poetic Beauty]

The last stanza is wonderful. this whole poem speaks of finding our dreams and higher power in life. For me that would be God.

[Tina Kline]

This is amazing, very impressive. A strong and powerful write. Just keep going, believe in yourself, its well worth the trip.

[Dezaraye]

Wow.

You leave me without words. This is amazing. I feel so much in reading this ... and I have no words for you but wow ...

[Kerry O'Connor]

I love the opening stanza of this poem... really beautiful selection of words and imagery and overall the message is very strong.

[Brianna Brie]

Wow, I could feel the struggle and disappointment in life. The ending destination is believable. The point of change was reached. That is where one has to dig down deep inside themselves. Asking these questions, "What I believe life means and where I want to go with the rest of my life?" Great read!

[EmpressPoetess]

"Eventually time spent
Below the living
Made me respect the mountain
And why it connects me to heaven.

The climb was not easy with
Broken wings
But when I reached the top
I was destined to fly"

Wowza! What a great poem this is! This is what poetry is all about, great metaphors and vivid imagination weave a tale of such inspiration and charm! Simply charming and enchanting!....

[HopelesslyDevoted]

this is awesome! and the ending is so encouraging!

[Marie Harrison]

I love the whimsical nature of this amazing write. Fantasy at it' best for me. I love the idea of a golden sea.

[The Analog Kid]

Nice conversational style. You pack a lot in here. Very straight forward, yet so insightful. Nature/heaven/hell/perseverance...Kudos!