Room Without A View

 

A white satin sheet

Drapes perfectly over

The empty bed.

 

Red curtains closed tight

Accent the undisturbed

Room’s mood.

 

A single candle flickers,

Clinging to the polished dresser

With molten wax.

 

The slightest breeze

Drifts under the locked door

To keep the silence company.

 

She sits alone in the dark closet

So she can understand

What it all means.

Reviews

[E.H. Monroe]

No lead in, no telling blurb just a man with a message and leaving his audience with the leftovers to figure out what it all means.
A girl build with too much on her damn plate tries to find the best way possible to shut the f*****g world out. Make sthe bed, hits one candle, closes the red drapes ( an imagine of hot blooded all to itself) and one girl, locked herself in to keep some sort of f*****g grip on whatever sanity she has.

Goddamn man. Ther is not a hint in the world that I would want, or to even know what I said was even close. This f*****g thing was 5 stanzad behemoth that desreves all the dissection it can get.

[Ralphy]

Wow this is some piece. You caught me off guard here by another captivity by none other than that cowboy....Nice write my dear friend...ralphy

[Jennifer Warnock]

It is interesting... gives good detail. I feel the emotions in this poem. Stuck, lost, uncertanty. Looking for a new identity. I like it. Very good. I like that it leaves you hanging. I think you should leave it this way. Makes you able to create your own ending in your mind.

[Bette]

very descriptive. well done! i love locking everyone out maybe a little music and a candle to clear my head.

[An owl on the moon]

I could see and feel this room.. this place of darkness.. of isolation.. Her contemplative life being moved within... Wondering now what might be going through her mind. So well done.

[A. Fischer]

I see this room possibly becoming her dark closet.....while her reflection on self keeps her company. It could be a long visit!

Nice!

[Janice Ann]

This leaves me wondering what she wants to figure out..part two indeed! Get to writing cowboy! :P

[Cherrie Palmer]

this poem needs a part two I loved it

[Poetic Beauty]

The last stanza is a bit mysterious and makes me wonder why she has locked herself in the closet. What has went wrong and why is she hiding. Great thought provoking write.

[Joanna Maharis]

I like the way you captured the essence of this scene. While I was reading this it felt like I was watching the opening for a movie.