Room Without A View

 

A white satin sheet

Drapes perfectly over

The empty bed.

 

Red curtains closed tight

Accent the undisturbed

Room’s mood.

 

A single candle flickers,

Clinging to the polished dresser

With molten wax.

 

The slightest breeze

Drifts under the locked door

To keep the silence company.

 

She sits alone in the dark closet

So she can understand

What it all means.

Reviews

[SpokenWord]

It is like the room had some action and now she is thinking it all over, was it something bad, as the set up was romantic in nature. Interesting write, that leaves us to our imagination of what occurred and what will happen next.

[J.M]

Wow - you really draw the reader in - telling so little and so much - creating so many questions in so few stanzas.

[pheasant]

Sets up a mysterious, yet well described setting, where we're left in contemplation as to what she's trying to understand in that dark closet... waiting for her partner to come home with a "friend" so she can peek through the door crack, just trying to find a safe place to get away from it all, or engaging in an adults game of hide and seek.(not likely)
Either way, nice descriptive imagery make this piece shine.

[CarrieLynn {Chameleon A..]

Sad yet erotic, but it is still a wonderful write!

[Tina Kline]

I see a sad tragic figure overwhelmed by life for some reason, hiding away in unreasonable terror in everyone's eyes but her own. Until she can figure something out that works for her, she'll be hiding away in her fears for a long time, perhaps unable to live her life even.

[emmajoy]

Contemplation, isolation, sensation .. a place in which to find out why.

Like it or not, this woman knows the right way.

[MiidniightSoul]

A breathtaking poem. Very beautifully written. It has a nice flow and a vivid imagery. Interesting and very descriptive. It's a brilliant piece.

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you left the suspense hanging like a kimono on a silk hanger!...the end just made this stand out..

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

ahh with that last stanza the poetic bursts wide open like a poppy gourd~imagination in full rotation~ perfect set up scenery for the subtle explosion of the final~

[Magdelena]

Now this was something. I so love how you left all for the readers imagination to ponder on. Great write and one I shall be going back to again and again.

Mags xx