Alter-Portrait

 

 

Gentle brushstrokes

Paint a smile

Upon her portrait face

But it won’t heal

The pain within the heart

Not in the picture frame.

The bright colors

Are nothing more

Than a mask

Covering macabre emotions

With a Mardi Gras attitude.

Loneliness is the theme

Of her artwork

At the exhibit;

Each one sold,

None taken home.

Red and black

Are the only colors

On her palette

As she creates

Her reflective masterpiece

For one final auction.

Reviews

[Poetic Beauty]

It is so true that we can hide our true feeling behind a mask of a smile and a friendly attitude but when it comes to art we pour our emotions into the pieces unable to hide those feelings the lurk deep within side our bodies and souls. You have painted a wonderful masterpiece here that clearly allows the reader to picture what you are describing.

It should be Than a Mask not Then a Mask. Simple little typo. I do that kind of stuff all the time lol

[Erotic Goddess]

Are nothing more
Than a mask
Covering macabre emotions
With a Mardi Gras attitude

We all hide behind something, don't we...and Mardi Gras is a great example of that isn't it...with the colors and the beads and the feathers...we are all looking for that excitement...that anonymous delight. Wonderful work here...

xxoxx

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much Goddess, good having you read my words again and hearing your thoughts.

[AYVID N]

A beautifully painted picture of a life of loneliness and emptiness...

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you... you are right on with your analogy.

[Renée]

Very interesting piece..I almost said something else..but I see this ..
a person can not fake what lies within..it always "bleeds" though ..

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Very well said, thank you.

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Beautifully expressed :)

[Laura Maidah]

The only part i didn't like is the "loneliness is the theme" lines. Try the old "show, don't tell" deal. Might make this pretty darn perfect. LOVE the last sentence.

[Dayran]

They say in Avalon that a lady's taste may extend beyond the secure home and family. That she may like a little adventure from a mysterious knight in armor. That it's sometimes about a dream.

[OT]

written brilliantly with a great depth perfect for interpretation, I also liked your kind of mid-line rhymes, I thought that was pretty skillful (macabre, mardis gras). Nice!!

[Chris38]

I write sometimes about the masks we hide behind. This was like a painting being gradually unveiled. Brilliant

[Jamie S.]

Another deep, vivid and emotional write. Great poetry Cowboy, thank you for sharing :)

[HopelesslyDevoted]

i love the way you opened up the poem on this one with a single brush stroke, it made the whole poem such a beautiful picture of expression!