Death By Immortality

What can I say, been reading Bram Stoker's Dracula

  

Cunningly the translucent clouds

Surround the mysterious man in the moon

Enough to still see that charming smile

While hiding its wicked intention.

 

A feminine silhouette graces the lunar glow,

Her skin radiates like virgin pearls

Leaving me helpless to her will

As she leans in to taste my fear.

 

My skin creeps like midnight crawlers,

My heart races without a sound,

A rush of pain ignites forbidden desires,

Generations flash through my mind.

 

Suddenly the beauty of night

Drips down my eyes like red wine

Quenching my lips desire for death

Till my veins are cold enough to freeze time.

 

Reviews

[justice]

Yes, yes, the content is great. The images are fantastic. The wording is impeccable. However, I want to comment on how wonderfully crafted this poem is phonetically. The sounds are absolutely great together. You combine just a beautiful array of sound. This poem is great for what it says, but in my mind it is made even better by how it sounds. THank you for sharing it. :)
J

[emmajoy]

Read then, read aloud - tis full of scenes waiting to live .. albeit mysterious and creepy. From what is dark your words make beauty: 'A feminine silhouette graces the lunar glow, Her skin radiates like virgin pearls'

[Closedown]

Yes. I love this poem. I have always been a Renfield fan myself, both in the book and the 1931 version of Dracula. I love this take on vampirism. Nobody compares to the D man. Love it.

[Alicia Schroeder]

Oh, now this is just awesome and I so, wish that we could freeze time.. that would be amazing.. Great write!!

[Angel Bird]

Big "Wow" factor!
Incredibly poetical skill makes your lines wonderfully vibrate with beautiful and erotical images.
Stunning work!

[Cafe Reader]

Fantastic imagery!

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing words and description in your words. I had to read a few times. Your words always a good field trip into imagination and story. A outstanding poem.
Thank you.
Coyote

[Fran Marie]

Wonderful imagery thru out this entire piece

with the last defining stanza being my favorite

Sperb Pen!!

[Lilly]

Wow! The images in this - right from the start - are stunning-breathtaking really...
A little dark yet beautiful at the same time. Really great piece I loved it!

[Georgia Gypsy]

I love the images and flow, takes one to the dark an makes them a witness to the actions taking place.
Really enjoyed reading this! Wonderful piece!

[Lauren Beth]

Beautifully dark...your words have such a fluidity and ease to them. Some amazing images and frightening feelings...bewitching.