Hollowed Be Thy Life

 

The moss-covered tombstone exclaimed

with a foggy accent,

“Here lies a man full of regret but feeling no pain”

as the shadow finds peace

resting on his sacred ground.

For the flesh is still pounding the pavement

while the heart still tries to move the earth.

When the soul becomes an instigator

for the damned

the spirit reluctantly becomes

a willing accomplice.

Surreal is the afterlife

when life is still all to real.

Every breath without exhale,

       every heartbeat without flow,

              every moment like sand

       giving the hourglass purpose.

These are the sacrifices made

when death accompanies re-birth.

 

Reviews

[Tina Kline]

This is very powerful. It sounds like a poem about the tortured dead, someone who died with regrets and is too restless to stay in the earth, perhaps that is the re-birth part, he is born again to grow up and finish the business he left undone in his last life. That's what your poem spoke to me and I must say, I really do like this write of yours.

[Bubo]

Such a powerful poem, and I loved every line, with it's wisdom, death and rebirth, as a normal mortal I think often of death, and where will I go, every breath without exhale.......so so many lines I thought oh.........beautiful.

Every breath without exhale,
every heartbeat without flow,
every moment like sand
giving the hourglass purpose.
These are the sacrifices made
when death accompanies re-birth.

[Voice]

OHHHH That is such a great read!! I really like what you have done here!! LOVE IT!!!

Voice

[Fran Marie]

Surreal is the afterlife
when life is still all to real


A most profund and powerful piece ~ very well crafted to be sure

wonderfully expressed!!

[Ladysue]

you are incredible. this is a masterpiece, Dale... so powerful and profound. superb visuals too. An magnificent write...truly...

[Gheeneil]

Wow, this is beautiful! I like the the "dissecting" part: the flesh, the heart,...
"full of regret but without pain" --> a strong line to define a, what tina kline described as, RESTLESS death. Powerful!

[Marie Harrison]

A spine tingling poem to read. I enjoyed it very much.

[An owl on the moon]

This is masterfully done, awakening for me that sense of autumn's themes of death and life... You bring about a powerful image of our eventual end, which has a way of stunning me into the reality of the now. So well voiced!

[Liza]

interesting
i enjoyed your talent and train of thought and creativity in this one

[Amy Bumpas]

These are the sacrifices made
when death accompanies re-birth.
That is a great line...the past has a way
of staying in ones soul.

This poem is so visual, dark, yet we want to
hear more.

Nice job!

[Seashell]

This one scared me CB..... lol The very thought of it all...oh dear...guess you must have made a good job of it tho....to induce such feelings.

Thanks..I think.. lol

Babsie Bee x