Without(Pieces Of Me)

 

Beneath the relentless sky

In a world built on subliminal treason

Are these aching bones

Virgin to daylight,

In search of sanctity;

Clutched in the vulture’s talons.

Removal of my flesh

Was vital in letting emotions flow.

Next the lungs had to be buried

Beneath the treaded dirt,

For without captive air

I could feel the true meaning

Of breathing.

Ripping out the heart

To leave it bleeding all over the ground

Allowed me to hear

The true meaning of love

Without the distorting beat

Distorting the truth.

Disposing of my stomach

Helped feed this barren wasteland

So I can see my hunger

Is not in vain.

Letting my mind shatter

And watching the pieces

Fall between the cracked terrain

Put in perspective

The education

That hinders my spirit’s freedom.

Now that I face

The harsh elements

And natural predators

In the rawest form possible

I feel confident

I am really living.

 

Reviews

[Marie Harrison]

Isn't that true, when the chips are down and we are facing the harshest elements of life that's when we are truly living. Those are probably the moments that will stand out the most to us when we gaze back over our fleeting lives. The fun and gay times are nice...but the rough ones where survival wasn't as easy, those are the bookmarking moments for most.

[Tina Kline]

This has many layers of depth to it, and has lots of powerful images in it. It's one of those poems that deserves more than one reading and pondering about. Nice job, really!

[Ladysue]

This is amazing. I read it twice, and wow, like Ed said you speak with might of mountains. Without(pieces of me) awesome title that fits this poem perfectly. brilliantly done...

[Tracie Skarbo]

Wow... Dale this is amazing!

[Jamie S.]

Another great poem Dale! It reminded me alittle of how I felt when I was working night shift and pregnant with my first :) Thank you for sharing, this is a great read!

[The Analog Kid]

Wow. I have to read it over and over. This is good poetry:)

[Ashley.M.E]

an interesting poem. Well done.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Very good piece. Very poetic... I agree with Ed and Jenny..
This does make one think.
Good writing!

Chloe

[Ed Hart]

sometimes you speak with the might of mountains

[Jenny Nelson]

Interesting. Worth reading and pondering over and over. A very strong piece. It's one way of looking at things, perhaps the best way. Well chosen words to get your point across. A really great write!