once standing tall and proud,passions ignighted along a trickling stream of hot wax,only to climax into a pool of reflection,of what it used to be and has now become...these lines hit hardest to my ears...
Home is nothing more
Then a square white circle
Sectioned off and marked
As evidence.
Gosh Dale, what a hard hitting piece this is and rightly so!! So many of this generation have fallen prey to Heroine, ruined lives and too many young deaths. The message doesn't seem to hit home.
"Inside a ring of fire
From Satan’s glare
Making your eyes a lit wick
And flesh the wax
When you burn the candle
At both ends"
I am glad to have come, and read this, so many fabulous lines, the way you take your words and make us feel how lonely life can be, from childhood to adult hood, and perhaps the lonely traps we fall into
I love the way in which every line is intricately woven to create a series of moving pictures that capture the true essence of solace. I like the lines
"When childhood becomes the prison you've escaped from
Adulthood becomes solitary confinement."
Those lines in particular are powerful, in the way that the really stick their landing. It's like an arrow that pierces its target. Some very impressive writing here.
You create such an atmosphere of pain and isolation. The feelings of abandonment that lead to the overwhelming desire for release.. a longing for escape. Powerful, my friend.
Ha! Well that just about sums life up. Interesting the perspective of home, I thought. Lots of wisdom in this clever poem of yours. I also enjoyed the interesting perspective of the temporary enjoyment of peace and how it fades quickly. Terrific write that I enjoyed.
I really had to stop and read every line carefully. You have a lot of ideas going on, and I like that. This poem, can take you on several "trips." lol. I must check out the book you mentioned that inspired this write! Thanks for sharing this! :)
My favorite lines-
"The only refuge
Are those straitjacket lies
That wraps the mind."
It's better to be dead and cool than alive and uncool
About
Birth name: Dale Deadmond
Born November 20th, 1969
Metaphorically speaking music is my BFF and poetry is my soulmate.
This is my world of
my favorite poets are E.A. Poe, Dylan Thomas, R.. more..