I often think new borns are the cleanest souls, coming into life with a blank slate to be filled with colours and riches............sadly, as is so often the case it does not turn out this way, and the soul is filled with images, thoughts that are not clean, and children are molded to become grown adults that commit such vile acts, causing pain.........you have written a stunning piece, full of imagary, which captures my thoughts very well.
From a seed fruit is bared to only be trodden and overrun with vines of antiquity, turning what was once good into dusted ash. Outstanding, and most philosophical piece, Dale.
Wow the thing that most called out to me was the awesome description with so little words and the fantastic presentation you used.
Keep it up mate! good rating for this
A cruel word never misses its mark, and there's no shortage of victims in the wheel of life when trampled by hate. I like the form that you chose for this poem, and the content is spot on. Quite frankly, it makes me angry. The hurt and harm from the hands of parents are apt to last for a lifetime, leaving the innocent battle-scarred and weary.
Powerful, aggressively written, and wonderfully done. This piece was excellent.. the last line really closed it up nicely while delivering a topical punch. Great piece.
My my my my! New born babies are the purest of them all. They are just born into a world of phoniness. Very well constructed. This should be posted on hospital door or something.
I often think new borns are the cleanest souls, coming into life with a blank slate to be filled with colours and riches............sadly, as is so often the case it does not turn out this way, and the soul is filled with images, thoughts that are not clean, and children are molded to become grown adults that commit such vile acts, causing pain.........you have written a stunning piece, full of imagary, which captures my thoughts very well.
What a profound poem. But part of becoming an adult is making your own ways, yet accepting our parents for who they are. I really enjoyed your poem. It's very beautiful.
It's better to be dead and cool than alive and uncool
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Birth name: Dale Deadmond
Born November 20th, 1969
Metaphorically speaking music is my BFF and poetry is my soulmate.
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my favorite poets are E.A. Poe, Dylan Thomas, R.. more..