The Sky In His World

 

He was mesmerized

       By her beauty,

Completely captivated

       By this splendid vision.

Her mere presence

        Inside his mind

Compares to hearing the ocean

       From a seashell.

He feels her heartbeat

       With hand on own chest,

Being his comforting reminder

       That his soul has a mate.

He appreciates the beauty

       Of her porcelain face,

Knowing it flows much deep

       Within her heart’s chambers.

Everyday he bathes in it

       Is an emotional baptism

That cleanses past heartaches

       Like sins forgiven.

The miles between them

       Are nothing more

Then stepping stones

       To the Garden of Eden.

Soon they will be standing as close

       As their hearts already are

And her breath will become

       His means of survival.

That will be the day      

       Heaven and earth merge

Within his world

       Making love the infinite sky.

            

Author's Note

I want to thank my muse for bringing this challenge and being the inspiration.

Reviews

[Georgia Gypsy]

This a beautiful picture of love between two people, such a connection is hard to find, and when worlds collide in a fashion as this there is a reason they were put in each other's path...to be happiness together.
A lovely piece of writing cowboy! Your muse is a lucky woman;)

[la Abeja]

Beautiful, absolutely beautiful. I am at a loss for words, what ever I say, I'm sure has already been said. Great visuals!

[Hippy]

i like this piece man its very loving and descriptive of something so beautiful

[Lindsay]

wow, i love this poem. the emotion is so strong and it really shows just how passionately the speaker feels about the subject.
Everyday he bathes in it
Is an emotional baptism
That cleanses past heartaches
Like sins forgiven.
these lines are awesome..a vivid metaphor to further convey his love for her.
great write!

[Sseoni]

That was such a beautiful poem! I can't even explain how passionate and beautiful this poem was! I'm speechless! It was just such a powerful poem full of such beauty and passion! I loved it! This is definitely going in my favorites! Wonderful poem! I enjoyed reading it very much! :D

[just rose.]

Gorgeous. Especially the last line.

[Katie]

Oh my god, this is beautiful!! Such a connection is conveyed between two people- it is amazing. The love this piece shows is evident. Loved it!!

[Jenny Nelson]

Beautiful! Very strong in the conveyence of a splendid union. Excellent poetic description.

[Coyote Poetry]

Poem is beautiful. Your description was amazing. Words building up to a outstanding ending. You create a beautiful vision with your words. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Very inspirational tribute to a muse.. and I will say thank you for being an inspiration to so many! Since I started here.. you have continued to post uplifting and sometimes outrageously funny comments that bring me up as well as so many others..

Your heart shines out in a very profound way here.. very uplifting and a real pleasure to read.. I hope your muse enjoys this! Keep up the great writes.. the rebel roars and the inner-child can be so much fun.. beautiful and outstanding job!

[Gary McDonald]

This is just beautiful in every way! The rich flow that carries your usual depth and vivid imagery is stunningly smooth here. I have been able to pick a favourite part,
"Everyday he bathes in it
Is an emotional baptism
That cleanses past heartaches
Like sins forgiven."
It speaks so strongly of that love that gives us another chance, but does so with a powerful delivery.
Great write!