Breath Then Blink

 

The structure might change

But the foundation remains the same…

A brick covered in ashes is still a brick.

The truth is underneath,

The surface is just a mirror;

       Sometimes cracked.

Eyes are only a map to the truth,

Subconscious is the navigator;

Just too often speaking in tongues,

Complicating internal faith…

So to move forward in times of change

Is nothing more than a breath then blink.

Reviews

[just rose.]

I like how the structure of this is almost-riddle-like, making me go back and read again. With a complicated notion expressed here, I find it speaking to me on more than one level, which, of course, is suggested by the meaning of the poem itself. And so my physical reading experience of this piece is thematically related to the subject matter. Which is an extremely difficult thing to pull off -- I've only seen it done before by Edgar Allan Poe. Love this!

[Constance-Outspoken]

I see a boo boo... look over your last line. Should the first then be than?
Anyhow, on to the depth of this poem. Wonderfully wise sentiments you've shared here... "a brick covered in ashes is still a brick"... very true. I also like how one reviewer said that believing is easier with the right person in your life. The right person makes you see the real you and then everything else becomes more clear as well.
Nicely penned, friend. :)

[Wicahpi]

There is much truth in these here words!
Straight to the point with no crap in between!
I love this!

[Katie]

Ahh :) The double meaning of this poem is so intense it almost makes my heart spin (in a good way!) You are so talented..

[April Child]

Well said, gosh how many times have I found myself wondering "why?" and it is totally as you say, that subconscious is the navigator, resistance is futile! Such a great poem. Very well done.

[SoulofManyFaces]

Very philosopical of you my friend.
I really like these lines: Eyes are only a map to the truth,
Subconscious is the navigator;
Just too often speaking in tongues,

The truth is all of us, all we have to do is take the
time to really see.

[Katie Louise Hughes]

This one was great, there were a few lines I can completely understand, then there were some that really leaves me to guessing. Overall, interesting and full of meaning! Liked it a lot!! :)

[closed account]

I love this poem, it is so true, the structure may change and actually changes often, but the foundation is the same very true statement, the part that i really relate too and believe with all my heart was this..

Subconscious is the navigator;


you can run and run, but the subconcious if you really pay attention is the navagator, it is what makes us WHOLE it is what makes us GOOD!!

very nice, I am putting this in my favs~~~

[Sam Severn]

Dear frickin' LORD this poem MOVES ME! You took me on a trip, n' then you cracked the whip! From the opening lines I feel I'm in the passenger seat of a big fat El Dorado haul-assing down some dusty lost highway.

Fabulous stuff, Cowboy!! ㋡ ROCK ON!

[Tracie Skarbo]

The structure might change
But the foundation remains the same…
A brick covered in ashes is still a brick.

It might still be a brick, however you will not know its luster until you have polished it and revealed the golden goodness inside, gold too comes in the form of a brick. Handle yourself with care as you delve into this change, I am confident that you will emerge on the other side, new, shiny and whole...

[LonelySoul]

very profound this tome I found,
answering questions left scattered around,
like pieces of the mirror shattered on the ground,
very profound this tome I found,
left alone to contemplate,without a sound,
I'll try not to complicate,this tome I found
and fit it into this mirror,left scattered upon the ground


sorry,just trying to get my "off the cuff" writing back online
I liked the work you did here,and it did connect quite a few dots I had,
thanx for sharing your work my friend