If Only

 

Dreams of late… silent movies

that speak so deeply to me,

I only wish they were in black and white

so as to bring complete clarity

of the ghosts in my mind.

These constant vibes

passing through closed parts of my heart

are more damaging

then the original condemning

that blocked the free flow of emotions.

In the moments of tender thoughts

I feel a hand around my throat

that renders me speechless

yet my reflection

is nothing more

then pale skin biting a lip.

Even emotional moisture

flows like a waterfall

beneath the surface

like a hidden paradise.

 

If only to see

through a dogs eyes

then maybe time

wouldn’t go so slow

when life has me beaten and caged.

 

If only my heartbeats

weren’t pinpricks

bleeding me dry of passion

in cruel fashion.

 

If only my dreams

were an escape from reality.

 

 

 

Author's Note

Nothing to do with my current mental state and probably not what you think its about.

Reviews

[emmajoy]

I read your beautifully presented poem then read the reviews .. strange that I thought of it as being a confirmation that while you remember being trapped, you've dreamed of letting go or, seeing how it would be to let go .. that the hurt's there but you see it for what it is. Dreams are our day arguing with our state of mind, straightening out, juggling and -this is some dream.

Rightly or wrongly, you've touched nerves and expressed strong emotions ..

(Methinks the where in last line should read were)

[Jamie S.]

Another excellent write Dale! Boy this one hit me right in the gut, cant say how but Im feelin it. I love the title, Im gonna start bending your ear when Im stuck on a title ;)

[Bette]

well done, i think this is sad and i am happy its not something your going through right now.

[Jessica Dallaire]

I'd like to know what it's actually about because I remember a time in my life that this poem describes perfectly. A wonderful write, glad to see that you're still writing. Keep up the good work!

-Jessica

[Constance-Outspoken]

This is one of the most eloquent, deeply meaningful poems I've read of yours. The feel flows between sorrow, longing, and hope, somehow... maybe because you are still able to dream. Regardless of its intent, to me it brings to mind some relationships I had that I didn't let go of when first I should have, and I stood there in limbo: apathetic, bored, unhappy, and with nowhere left to go.

[Laura Sparkle]

Incredible write! Always typical you: perfect grammar, impeccable imagery projected into my mind. Bravo!

[A. Fischer]

I really love this one! I find reading another writer not a way to "figure them out", but to find a thread that ties it to my frames of references (if possible). Maybe even to relish life through others' eyes, their fantasies, hopes or failures..

[Ed Hart]

contrary to your disclaimer in "author's note," dreams, particularly disturbing ones are the underlying layers of our psyche telling us what it's like down there...kind of like a cerebral bellyache...

[MagiCrystal]

If only to see

through a dogs eyes

then maybe time

wouldn’t go so slow

when life has me beaten and caged.

Now these verse got me thinking a lot... and also

If only my heartbeats

weren’t pinpricks

bleeding me dry of passion

in cruel fashion.



If only my dreams

where an escape from reality.

What my mind thinks.. ? wow..
Reality is in.. love it..
Did I ever tell you .. that your poetry it's getting better , and better?
Well !!!!!
It is... !
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[closed account]

I read it twice and am stuck... lol but then again, it's your own masterpiece so
it can come from somewhere so deep only for you to understand? or from nowhere at all,, great work... (the dogs eyes???) metaphoric for loyalty????

[Poetic Beauty]

Umm, I have had dreams that keep reminding me of a love I once had. Today I had a dream that I bath his grandmother's dogs and never knew it was his grandmother. lol I know these feelings. I may not be able to pin point that exact topic we are talking about here but I have felt like this due to love and even that life wasn't where I wanted it to be. Great job on conveying the emotions in this poem.