Anti-Fairytale

 

You must be related

To Brothers Grimm

Cause God knows

You can write a fairytale.

Had me believing in forever after

With your Cinderella charms,

I guess that glass slipper

Was really made of plastic

Till it melted from

Deception in your hot breath.

Like a child coming of age;

Love to me is now Peter Pan…

       I am the Tin man

       And you the wicked witch.

Reviews

[Constance-Outspoken]

Ouch, this makes me want to punch the subject who inspired this, hard, no kidding... however, I know how it is to be her, so I would restrain myself.
Emotive, expressive little write here. Fairy tales... they aren't quite what we make of them, ever. There is always another side to that story we have in mind.
A hug and a prayer for a better tomorrow for you.

[MagiCrystal]

Damn...a wicked witch... do they exist?
A lot of emotions here..My Dellito.. divine writing..
It gets better each time I read you..
I wish you the best..My little friend

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Oh no.. if this is real emotions it's a crime to allow someone such power over your feelings! That glass slipper turning plastic.. in a world where everything seems it's built on facades (it has to be for many.. noone wants reality?). A message that you have to look past the cover of a book.. and always protect the core values of your heart!

Fantasies can destroy trust if they go too far.. I read your updated BIO.. I can see you feel terribly.. I hope you mend fast.. many read your work and need your inspiration out here! Love is for everyone.. you'll find it when you least expect it and not looking for it usually.. sad to see you down.

[Bette]

woohoo! go cowboy! this was...harsh but well done!!

[Spoken]

wow.. i loved this! Awesome write, very witty and clever!

[Brokensoul]

I can see a sardonic smile behind these lines. A little mocking and jeering, using fairytale as the theme around which this curt piece is woven is absolutely brilliant!

[closed account]

damn....... oh my what an expression you have poured, I am such an advocate
of writing from the heart, or maybe its fiction, either way this was raw
and very thought proviking... i know a witch or two... my ex sister inalaw comes to mind lol

[Millionth Muse]

Wow...you spared no punches in this one. Tragic, a little dark, but beautifully expressed. Sending you a virtual *hug* and a smile too. :)

[Poetic Beauty]

I love how you used characters every one can relate to. This is a angry/sad poem. I have felt like this many days only problem is I am the one who left in my situation so I don't really have a right to get mad at him. I did however leave when i still deeply loved him. Not for someone else. this poem speaks to me for I get angry. I love the flow of this poem. Hang in there. Life will get better it always does.