Anti-Fairytale

 

You must be related

To Brothers Grimm

Cause God knows

You can write a fairytale.

Had me believing in forever after

With your Cinderella charms,

I guess that glass slipper

Was really made of plastic

Till it melted from

Deception in your hot breath.

Like a child coming of age;

Love to me is now Peter Pan…

       I am the Tin man

       And you the wicked witch.

Reviews

[Constance-Outspoken]

Ouch, this makes me want to punch the subject who inspired this, hard, no kidding... however, I know how it is to be her, so I would restrain myself.
Emotive, expressive little write here. Fairy tales... they aren't quite what we make of them, ever. There is always another side to that story we have in mind.
A hug and a prayer for a better tomorrow for you.

[just rose.]

Zing! You do a good job of incorporating fairy tales here, and the darkness beneath them. Well done!

[THERISA]

Sorrow
Streams from your verse
Like one
Who has been mortally wronged
In your heart and soul
Seeking solace and peace
For yourself.

Fear not
For your heart is still here
Just encased in armour
Awaiting for the proper key
To unlock it.

[Holly-Marie]

I thought this was beautiful. Very clever and so full of emotion.
Simple yet thought provoking. Clever in so many ways. I especially loved the lines "I guess that glass slipper was really made of plastic." Those lines hold so much emotion and meaning. Beautifully dramatic.

[Sheila Kline]

Uh oh....deception, lies, false hope.....that glass slipper didn't fit!!
Yes, that would be anti all right!!
Another creative write!!

[J.P. Bristow]

..............OMG I wrote something very similar years ago...but yours took the cake. well done........

[Laura Sparkle]

Fantastic write! Horrible horrible inspiration. The person deserves a good yelling at. But the overall piece is absolutely incredible Dale! Your pieces are always just so well thought out. Bravo mon ami!

[Seashell]

So much said in such few lines. Well written using characters to compare. Pain is oozing from it which makes it sad. Think you should go to another Ball and find your Cinderella there !! She's out there you know....just waiting to be hit by your magical spell. Good luck.
Thanks as always for your share
Babsie xxx

[Tracie Skarbo]

wow... this one has some cutting to it for sure. I can feel that knife you weld. Of course I know where it is coming from. I only hope that you will, over time, find yourself believing in love again. I wish the best for you and I know in time, you will learn to love again.

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

i really like this "I am the tin man and you the wicked with" the whole read was very good

[Erotic Goddess]

Ah Dale! I'll be the wicked witch and turn her into a toad. I like being the wicked witch! :) I am sorry for the sadness in this piece, but I love how you cleverly wove the whole thing together.

All my love,
Goddess