Three Views, One Vision

 

Dirty window;

Distorts the truth,

Dimming that gleam

In your eyes:

Leave the illusion

Of your skin covered in dirt,

Making way for your epitaph.

 

Tinted window;

Covers the truth,

Concealing any expression

Upon your face:

Leaving you as blank

As an unwritten verse,

Canceling a read between the lines.

 

Clean window;

Is the clear truth,

The one I always imagine

Escaping your lips:

Jail breaking thoughts

That breaks me free of guilt,

So life is no longer like parole.

 

Three windows, four walls…

Three views, one vision…

Three chances, one choice…

 

…Maybe I’ll take a chance and breakdown

         the pane-less wall instead.

 

Reviews

[Fran Marie]

A most powerful write with a grand message therein~ i think
the evil men do is indeed a dirty window~ and most of us live day to day
in the tinted window behind masks so to speak~ and try as we may we
want that clear window of truth , yet so hard to find it and bring to daily
use~ many of us opt for the wall no doubt~ a wonderful piece with great
use of mtaphors, cleverly penned and illustrated with complementary picture
that matched your words/vision perfectly!!

[emmajoy]

Maybe the windows are your eyes, seeing what the mind-set is when you look out .. and whatever the fact, you've really looked from those different windows, Dale.

What a wonderful way of almost analysing your own way of feeling, of using that to look on life; you write in metaphors but the end result is so beautiful logical.
As to that final line .. clever, lovely.

[Jenny Nelson]

Great write! Love the ending, and the rest leads up to it so well. Nice observation and great expression.

[Millionth Muse]

Great imagery...I'm impressed at the way that you used the same theme throughout the entire piece without falter. I always like the way that you weave a tale into your poetry that I can truly latch onto. My only little question is with the third stanza: You've set it up in the beginning with a "singular" voice, but by the time you get to:

Jail breaking thoughts
That breaks me free of guilt

It almost seems to me that it should be "That break me free of guilt". It's a tough call becuase it could be referring back to the "clear truth", but because it's so close, it seems as though it's referring back to "thoughts". So...maybe just read that stanza over a few times (I did several times), and see if you can feel what I'm saying.

As always, though, an expertrly crafted piece!

[An owl on the moon]

These comparisons and contrasts are woven so intricately. Brilliant metaphor. Your vivid imagery and expressions in this one are simply excellent! What a powerful write...

[Lena M. P.]

What wonderful metaphors. I think this may be one of my favorites of yours. Good flow, imagery is excellent, ending is perfect.

[closed account]

Dale how metaphoric and creative this was,
I really loved how you used all angles, this was
A wonderful write.. and of course I would never
Expect anything less.. I thoroughly enjoyed it
And related to it, in my favorites it will go!

[Ellen Hammond]

The last line really ties this all together. When read allowed, pane-less can well be interpreted as 'painless'. As the 3 windows you mentioned can each bring their own style of pain eventually. I really like this piece because it makes me think.

[Gary McDonald]

A fascinating, intriguing write. I was hooked, wanting to know where you were going, and you didn't disappoint. You deliver your messages beautifully, with a swift punch at the end. Brilliantly written!!

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the ending. Breakdown the pane-less wall instead. We can blind our self in pity and fear. Better to be free of walls and sadness. A excellent poem.
Coyote