Deserted Revelation

 

A distant echo cried

Over a strange desert plain;

Lost in the nothing,

Like forgotten dreams.

 

My soul felt like

The infinite night sky;

My heart the stars,

Seen after long burned out.

 

Walking down memory lane

Towards the hypnotic wailing

In my own shoes

That don’t seem to fit

I knew I must recognize the signs,

For this journey couldn’t be retraced

Cause the breadcrumbs I left

Sank deep in the mud.

 

Taking in the sight of the lush greenery,

Enjoying the mist of the cool crisp air

Tantalize my pores, refreshing my imagination

I walked the nurturing road

Knowing soon I will risk turning to dust

Trudging a barren land in search of why

My vocals chose to roam alone.

 

Days of sun baked searching

Produced a question as parched

As my aching body becoming one

With the unforgiving terrain.

Then with one big swallow of sand

I finally realized the truth…

 

If my voice doesn’t seek

Then I shall never find.

Suddenly becoming dust in the wind

Was a hopeful destiny.

 

 

 

Reviews

[Seriana]

Dale, you seem like a man on a journey itself. I've noticed a transition in your writing that expresses just that. It is wonderful to see a transformation in your life spelled out in your words. I like the depth. It shows character and a tough spirit. :)
Thank you for openly sharing your words. They continue to inspire. :)

[Poetic Beauty]

This poems sounds like you are in one place looking back and reliving another. It is a beautiful poem that has sad undertones to it. The peace speaks to me in volumes for I am in a transitioning period right now. I am going back to school and looking at moving back out on my own soon. The transition in the poem makes me think of my life.

[Gary McDonald]

Well I think after 29 reviews, there isn't much i can add. Fascinating imagery joined together in a ridiculously smooth flow. All with the ending to wrap it up so wonderfully. An incredible piece of writing!

[Millionth Muse]

"Lost in the nothing"...I really love this line. I feel a true sense of transformation in this piece; you describe the feeling of "epiphany" well. There is both an innocence and a sensuality in this one; beautiful word choice. The last stanza had me nodding my head. Kudos.

[Narnie]

I really like the sounds and flow of this. It is complex but very singular in it's voice, which is sometimes such an enchanting thing when reading someone's poetry.

[TAO]

At first, I felt somewhat sad and alone reading this... Then when you got to the end, it became bright, and happy. I'd liken this to the hopeful aspects of Nostradamus' quatrains, even though it is not a prophecy. There is always a light at the end of the tunnel. Beautiful poem, very well written. I very much loved the imagery, too. Reminds me of being at the Painted Desert.

[Katie]

I love the analogies and the beautiful picture that it paints in my mind. You are truly talented.

[Poeticpiers]

Amen seems to be the best response

[cest la vie]

I can't beleive I missed this piece.. Zang Dale..
this is wonderful..Hope..
without it what would we have?
thanks for sharing this with us:-)

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

gosh, gulp, I'm so tantalized by this one. I can picture each detailed word so vividly, the bread crumbs sinking into the mud, and your voice so essential to your subsistance, great write Dale, mishel