Legacy Imagined

 

Staring towards God’s lair

The sky like my fireplace;

Cold, dark, empty…

I tilt my head: nothing changed,

Except my point of view.

I close my eyes; clarity becomes surreal,

The sky a glowing amber,

Psychological flames heat my mind

Causing it to rise…

Carried away on a hypnotic breeze.

I shout at the top of my lungs

So my thoughts can ride my vocal hopes

Like a magic carpet, till they become vapor trails.

I freefall; the ocean my safety net,

The tide my salvation,

The shoreline my savior.

My footprints in the sand

Become hot to the touch,

Each step sinking deeper

Till I find myself

Within a foreign basement;

The smell of roses permeates

This damp structure,

Somehow unsettling to my senses

My stomach tightens

Like a hangman’s noose.

A flicker, then a flash;

A spotlight then accents a table

With a game of poker in progress…

I’m compelled to join.

Five card draws the game;

E.A. Poe to my left,

The lizard king to my right…

All my cards; ace of spades

Still I win the hand;

A gust of wind,

I open my eyes…

The sky is blue

My face pale white.

Reviews

[Bare trees]

If I didn't know any better I'd say you had one hell of an lsd trip. Or was it acid, Mushrooms? Just a dream? Whatever it was, you explained it well and it seemed to go by pretty fast which shows how engrossed I was. To be sitting next to those guys would be somthing. Good job.

[Tina Kline]

This is very mysterious, rather dark but not in a negative way and very beautiful all at the same time. Very well written, it really gets the reader pondering, at least I did.

[Millionth Muse]

Unexpected piece coming from you...but the darkness and sultriness of this piece that is undoubtedly tragic is also quite beautiful. This suits you...though all that you write suits you. Too many beautiful lines to point out...a great write!

[Narnie]

This is much more surreal from you and it really suits you. I'm kinda pleased I read this today when your new photo shows you with your face skywards.

[QuietPoet]

This was very interesting, I didnt know what was being said till towards the end. Very thoughtful write. I enjoyed it. Nicely done.

[Seriana]

I'm very impressed with this piece Dale, and have to agree with Angel, it's quite different from your norm. But, it works perfectly. I especially liked this line:

"I tilt my head: nothing changed,
Except my point of view."

What a stopper. That's the way it has to be sometimes. I think this piece could apply to alot of individual circumstances in many people's lives. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Angelheaded Hipster]

Aw Dale....you went and played against the Ol Man didnt you? You silly man...you're lucky you won this time...usually the Ol Man doesnt like losing so easily...

and this was a good write, its different from what Ive seen of your other stuff. Silly you playing with the Devil...

[A. Fischer]

Well, Cowboy, seems as though your thoughts are all well-defined! I'm humbled to have someone with such creative thoughts comment on anything of mine! A very enjoyable read!

[Katie]

This was such a compelling write. It had me sucked in from the first line. I love the way you incorporated your heroes and life meanings to you. This was beautiful.

[Phibby Venable]

shout at the top of my lungs

So my thoughts can ride my vocal hopes (great lines) love the poem!