Legacy Imagined

 

Staring towards God’s lair

The sky like my fireplace;

Cold, dark, empty…

I tilt my head: nothing changed,

Except my point of view.

I close my eyes; clarity becomes surreal,

The sky a glowing amber,

Psychological flames heat my mind

Causing it to rise…

Carried away on a hypnotic breeze.

I shout at the top of my lungs

So my thoughts can ride my vocal hopes

Like a magic carpet, till they become vapor trails.

I freefall; the ocean my safety net,

The tide my salvation,

The shoreline my savior.

My footprints in the sand

Become hot to the touch,

Each step sinking deeper

Till I find myself

Within a foreign basement;

The smell of roses permeates

This damp structure,

Somehow unsettling to my senses

My stomach tightens

Like a hangman’s noose.

A flicker, then a flash;

A spotlight then accents a table

With a game of poker in progress…

I’m compelled to join.

Five card draws the game;

E.A. Poe to my left,

The lizard king to my right…

All my cards; ace of spades

Still I win the hand;

A gust of wind,

I open my eyes…

The sky is blue

My face pale white.

Reviews

[Bare trees]

If I didn't know any better I'd say you had one hell of an lsd trip. Or was it acid, Mushrooms? Just a dream? Whatever it was, you explained it well and it seemed to go by pretty fast which shows how engrossed I was. To be sitting next to those guys would be somthing. Good job.

[Ashley.M.E]

I like this poem, that's all I can think of xD

[SamBug]

Wow. This was good and very impressive. You did very good writing this. I loved it.

[J.Black]

Well Dale, this was pretty darn good. I must say it's almost a different colour for you: Black, dark but almost enchanting at the same time. I like when you write like this. I think you should give it another go sometime sooner seeing that this looks to be like an older piece. Eitherway, great!

[Liza]

all the words flowed and developed the depth of this piece - the only words that caught me off guard and made it hard for "me" to understand was Psychological flames

[JENY]

Good….
I liked it….
But….ending was not so capturing…
I don’t know….
Nice reading altogether…

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

love it! sounds like quite a trip.. loved your poker playing buddies.. good read so easy to see.. happy weekend!

Chloe

[Naomi Montana Walsh]

I really loved this one , in fact I think thus far your best..such aptly placed imagery..impressive..this is a glowing review..100 rating...

[EmpressPoetess]

A nightmare? Depression? or Comprehension of the meaning of life? I love this poem and the wide expression here. great job!

[HorrorMaster]

Amazing poem. Nicely done

[J.P. Bristow]

this was well thought and really interesting. though a different vein for you---it shows us yet another side of your ever vast imagination.