Asphalt Epitaph

  

Within the calm

       Before the witching hour

A single streetlight

       Casts an epiphany

Upon a lonely shadow

       Liquefying in the wind

The only salvation

       Are dust particles

Weighing it down

       Into the virgin asphalt

Now the pavement

       Becomes the epitaph

With out a written word

       It tells of a soul

That lived with emotions

       Like its surface

And now will spend eternity

       Watching the journey.

Reviews

[MagiCrystal]

Spend Eternity watching the Journey..now these words made me think about life and future..but what is it that I am missing? Your words I love.. and in all these..your soul is all over in this poem.. I like how you flow..
Lovely as your soul.. I wish you the best..

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

I'm spilling my blood on the pavement ...watching it pool in his heart. My epitaph is to love the world, but it's oh so hard to watch it commit Suicide! Your writing is brilliant as it always is and I am hoping the more I watch the more I will feel inspired:) My blood has turned to dust and I'm blowing across the desert.......

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you for the very interesting review :)

[KAOlmsted]

Oh, not quite new, just new to me ;-)

Wowwy McZowie...this is really good, and I just love the title...(Frieda stole 'Holy cats', I'm working on a new catch phrase XD)

Great stuff, älskling ;-)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you vacker so much. That is a cool catch phrase... maybe I should go with "what in the blue hell"

[KAOlmsted]

xD Yes! I love that...but only when there is some confusion. It was either Wowwy McZowie or my other favorite, cats alive...as in "Cats alive, that was awesome!" But you know Frieda will just steal that too xD Actually, in all honesty, it is my life's mission to get everyone in the free world to say Holy Cats :-D

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You so funny :)

[KAOlmsted]

holy cats !!! xD

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Frieda actually said that on my new poem "Got Me Right Where I Want To Be"

I always thought cats were satan's minions, LOL

[KAOlmsted]

NO! Cats are holy...holy cats ;-) (told ya...she stole it) xD

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Lovely poem sad sentiments. You give voice to the inantimate objects nicely.
Very well written, Dale.

Chloe

[Helen Crutchett]

Very descriptive and well written piece Dale.
Deep and eerie, you were spot on with this!

Helena

[cest la vie]

Shadows, streetlights... what a wonderful concept for a poem..
The pavements of life contain our shadows and those of all the others..
Rally a unique and insightful piece. :-)

[Again]

wow. you've outdone yourself my friend.

[Ms. Gruye]

I know this was not what you were going for, but this poem reminded me of hiroshima: of people's shadows that were permanently trapped in the sidewalk when the blast hit.

You dod a good job of striking a gothic chord with this one. Think Edgar Allen Poe, but with knowledge of the scientific sun. Viva la

[Bullet Soul]

I could see this so clearly as I read through it. You've turned something so simple as a shadow at night into a magical, beautiful piece of poetry. So many emotions live in this piece, and I guarantee I will feel them each and every time I read this, no matter how often. This is truly captivating. A brilliant write, from a brilliant writer.

[Katie]

"With out a written word..It tells of a soul"-- Beautiful poem, I love how it literally paints such a pretty picture in my mind. Loved it!