Dysfunctional Tree (Just Ask The Shadow)

  

So I get you fearing

         Only the dead of night

Guess you never heard of

          A trick of the light.

Using the sun as a blinder

         From what hold true

This is the weakness

         I’ll use against you.

Thinking that your reflection

         Is a form of security

Not seeing the dirt on the mirror

         As a symbolic loss of purity.

Even the purest of blood

         Is tainted by evil

Just look into the mystery

         Of the family will.

This ancient art of illusion

         Is what created Genesis

Allowing mankind to believe

         Death is riding a Pegasus.

Just keep believing you’re safe

         In the clearing of daytime

For the shadow of that genetic tree

         Highlights a mental crime.

Reviews

[Honeypot]

This is really interesting. My interpration is that is about somebody who is all smiles and false pretenses, pretending everything is perfect, making themselves look the part, but its a facade. Something is askew with their family. Its could be just a general unhappiness or something way more sinister. You've got some really great lines in there too:

Thinking that your reflection
Is a form of security
Not seeing the dirt on the mirror
As a symbolic loss of purity

and

Just keep believing you're safe
In the clearing of daytime
For the shadow of that genetic tree
Highlights a mental crime

Really great job on this piece. It the type that has so many levels we might never understand.

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

wow, that was really deep. I don't even think I could fully grasp all the ideas. Means you be writing from the brain, not just the heart. As always, great work by you. It also has a Halloween theme, def what I like. A haunting quality. thanks.

[*** Hey Jude***]

These life changing events cause memories that only with much time will fade they never disappear leaving us to try to pick up the pieces. Then realizing how strong you are to have made it through without holding on to bitterness, but rather allowing this to strengthen your character. You bright spirit shines. Thank you for sharing such a well-written piece! ~ Jude :-)

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Oh la la - sent chills up my spine - truly so...a ponderific poem! So many nuances and caresses. Thanks for sharing.
Light,
Siddartha

[TL Boehm]

oh I love this. I agree - very creative and unique. I have some of that going on under my tree for sure. Just like shade in October...this one is chilling. Nicely done.

[Stacey Watts]

I like this piece. It is such a well thought out deep piece. I maybe am going to go in a different direction of interpretation perhaps but I see this piece about hiding. Hiding things perhaps that no one else can see. Knowing all to well if we keep pretending things will be ok and no one will suspect. Then when we end up alone we see the flaws as they haunt us because we are never really truly able to expose ourselves for fear. Ok maybe I have missed it completely but you know me I tend to wander around like a little lost sheep sometimes. Excellent job anyway.

[An owl on the moon]

This is such a powerful vision of humanity... our fraility... our weakness... our connection back to the beginning... Amazing write!

[ABitBrokenPoetry]

this is very dark & intriuging. i'm not sure if you are hinting at long lost family secrets or perhaps mental illness, but we've all got twists & turns in our family lineage that we don't know about. there is a skeleton in everyone's closet! "Thinking that your reflection
Is a form of security
Not seeing the dirt on the mirror
As a symbolic loss of purity." really loved these lines. this is a great dark & fascinating write.

[Fran Marie]

Not seeing the dirt on the mirror
As a symbolic loss of purity.
Even the purest of blood
Is tainted by evil
Just look into the mystery
Of the family will.

Wow, this is deep and powerful to be sure, a most thought provoking piece,
I think one of your best ~ but then everything you write is very well crafted
your writing does not disappoint! Great PeN!

[Brianna Brie]

Not seeing the dirt on the mirror
As a symbolic loss of purity.
Even the purest of blood
Is tainted by evil

The lines above grabbed me and caused me to think, "Whoa, this is good!" It feels a bit philosophical with ancient wisdom in the mix. Super write! Enjoyed it much.

[Phibby Venable]

This ancient art of illusion

Is what created Genesis

Allowing mankind to believe

Death is riding a Pegasus. (wish I had thought of those lines)
great deal of depth and fine writing.